There are some brilliant phrases in this, Nathan. I'd wonder about
finding a more shapeliness for it, but I'd guess that's for a later
cast.
Best
Dave
2008/6/22 Nathan Hondros <[log in to unmask]>:
> I said more than a week ago that I was going to focus on poetry solidly for
> a week. With special emphasis on internal consistency. A good first step
> towards that? It has no title.
>
> flame trees sleep off
> the fretting birds
> and the boy climbing
> for all he's worth,
>
> just to see what
> the tree can tell
> from its sluggish doze,
> through cauterised green eyes.
>
> on the ground
> i am perspective/convergence,
> a meeting angle bisecting
> just beyond his focus.
>
> climbing down quick,
> he has seen with vegetable eyes,
> and goes shrugging off foliage,
> the narcoleptic pace of trees.
>
>
>
> --
> http://nathanhondros.blogspot.com
>
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David Bircumshaw
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