http://www.elfwood.com/art/h/a/hathaway/jerhan.jpg.html
gives you the elves.
Finnegan speak is quite fun in poems, now and then, isn't it? The only
trouble is, and I've found this out myself, after a few years you
start forgetting what the puns were in your own poems, that happened
to Joyce too with parts of the Wake didn't it?
Best
Dave
2008/6/1 kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]>:
> as in Finnegans. what do you mean, prowling elves? :o
>
> KS
>
> 2008/5/31 David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]>:
>
>> Kasper
>>
>> do you mean 'wakean' as in Finnegans or as in prowling elves?
>>
>> 2008/5/31 kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]>:
>> > fantastic Janet. you've written a poem in wakean! I enjoyed hugely
>> >
>> > KS
>> >
>> > 2008/5/30 Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>:
>> >
>> >> I thought after commenting about Prynne might be a good time to work on
>> >> this
>> >> poem ;-) but I'm still not satisfied with lines 6 and 7 and particularly
>> >> not
>> >> with 'extension' and 'meatsweat' which are too orange. (Words with a lot
>> of
>> >> 'e' sounds in them always seem orange to me... anyone else experience
>> this
>> >> kind of synesthesia?)
>> >>
>> >> In this poem my expression is tightly constrained by the form the poem
>> has
>> >> taken. Finding the one perfect word can take days or years.
>> >>
>> >> *breath*
>> >>
>> >> brush with that nightskin this dayskin.
>> >> tangential coatmerge. totem furs.
>> >> chimpgirl. panther.
>> >>
>> >> chill chubby sunmemory, thinlimbed mist.
>> >> dimlysensed. vibrational. suspended.
>> >> extension. locus.
>> >>
>> >> taint inspiration, meatsweat droplets.
>> >> turning. pacing. turning. pacing. focus.
>> >> flash flood of star-mangled breath
>> >>
>> >> just outside the scent markers of the gang boss
>> >> just outside the territory of the tribe
>> >> as they sleep. snoring. gone. I alert
>> >>
>> >> both eyes scanning
>> >> skin stretched wide
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> --
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>> >
>>
>>
>>
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