Yes, interesting, Doug, not least for the structure you choose with
diminishing stanza sizes. Perhaps the stanzas could shrink even more
towards the end? Patrick might be on to something with 'capital tease' for
historians to grapplw with. Should it be blood-soaked? Good to see bush get
a guernsey, giving both an Australian flavour and, perhaps, implicating
those formerly powerful Bush boys.
Bill
On Thu, 16 Mar 2017 at 6:04 am, Patrick McManus <
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> Doug interesting I wondered if it could also end 'tease the historians
> to come'
>
> without the concrete it could be all history -methinks
>
>
> On 15/03/2017 16:18, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> > So many cities
> > shone upon their hills once
> > gold burnished
> > in the setting sun
> >
> > stone & concrete
> > shattered now
> > by jungle vines
> > the blood soaked ropes of war
> >
> > across the centuries
> > they fall
> > wall by wall
> >
> > stone blocks tossed
> > scattered & covered
> > by mud & bush
> >
> > fortress this country or that
> > their cities a capital
> > joke on historians to come
> >
> >
> > Douglas Barbour
> > [log in to unmask]
> > https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> >
> > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> Continuations 2 (UofAPress).
> > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> > Listen. If (UofAPress):
> >
> >
> >
> > and as you read
> > the sea is turning its dark pages
> > turning
> > its dark pages.
> >
> > Denise Levertov
>
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