I think you do "that" quite often. This was, to me, a relatively (and
quietly -- on a v good way) spectacular example
L
On 31 March 2017 at 15:54, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Thanks Lawrence
>
> I like to hope I manage that sometimes…
>
> Doug
> > On Mar 31, 2017, at 3:01 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >
> > Yes. Take that word out and the whole falls much flatter, regardless of
> the
> > damage done rhythmically. Take out "delicate" and "deliquescent" seems
> > quite off, wrong.... but the two together is apt and impressive. At the
> > same time the sound play is fine
> >
> > best
> >
> > L
> >
> > On 29 March 2017 at 22:00, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >
> >> Doug, this is beautiful, an instant favourite for me of all your poems I
> >> have read, not least for your use of deliquescent, a new (to me) and
> >> utterly appropriate word here.
> >>
> >> Bill
> >>
> >> On Thu, 30 Mar 2017 at 4:50 am, Patrick McManus <
> >> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >>
> >>> Doug thanks yes we have lost our dark
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> On 29/03/2017 18:01, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> >>>> in the cities late at night
> >>>> the darkness
> >>>> never fully arrives
> >>>>
> >>>> a complicit light reaches
> >>>> into every yard stretches
> >>>> along the streets
> >>>>
> >>>> at some point snow
> >>>> a spattered curtain
> >>>> adds even more bright
> >>>>
> >>>> to the always held at bay
> >>>> dark & slowly
> >>>> begins to outline branches
> >>>>
> >>>> a delicate & deliquescent
> >>>> etching emerging
> >>>> to be lost by morning
> >>>>
> >>>> Douglas Barbour
> >>>> [log in to unmask]
> >>>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> >>>>
> >>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> >>> Continuations 2 (UofAPress).
> >>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> >>>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
> >>>>
> >>>>
> >>>> and as you read
> >>>> the sea is turning its dark pages
> >>>> turning
> >>>> its dark pages.
> >>>>
> >>>> Denise Levertov
> >>>
> >>
>
> Douglas Barbour
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> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>
> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
> 2 (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>
>
> and as you read
> the sea is turning its dark pages
> turning
> its dark pages.
>
> Denise Levertov
>
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