Yes, where, Doug? All I could find was a correspondence with Robert Creeley.
Bill
> On 24 Jul 2015, at 9:50 am, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> I'd be interested to read Olson on brackets, yes. Where is it?
>
> Thanks, Doug.
>
>
> Andrew
>
>> On 24 July 2015 at 07:50, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> Yes, but Im tempted to invite you to find & read Olson on brackets….
>>
>> Doug
>>> On Jul 23, 2015, at 5:53 AM, andrew burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>
>>> Bravo! What a good result. Well done, Bill.
>>>
>>> Andrew
>>>
>>>> On 23 July 2015 at 20:20, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>>
>>>> Thanks, Pat. You keep me on my toes.
>>>>
>>>> Bill
>>>>
>>>>> On 23/07/2015, at 7:14 PM, Patrick McManus wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>> What team work!!! Well done Bill and it works better (imho!) p drifting
>>>>> prosaically
>>>>>
>>>>> -----Original Message-----
>>>>> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]]
>> On
>>>>> Behalf Of Bill Wootton
>>>>> Sent: 23 July 2015 09:56
>>>>> To: [log in to unmask]
>>>>> Subject: Re: Drifters
>>>>>
>>>>> Great idea, Jill. Thank you. I can see how moving 'into poetry' to the
>>>> end
>>>>> would justify use of the delay-inducing sets of parentheses. And the
>>>>> 'uncanny' bit kind of doubles up the line about 'perception inverters
>>>>> doesn't it. My test with brackets is to read it through without the
>>>> brackets
>>>>> and see if that works. So I have fiddled a bit again now and cut.
>>>>> Transformations and propulsions have bitten the dust to allow 'drift'
>> to
>>>>> have its head.
>>>>>
>>>>> So, see Pat, all this advice has helped. I think so anyway. Thanks too,
>>>>> Millicent, Doug, Max, Andrew.
>>>>>
>>>>> Here is my 'worked' final version.
>>>>>
>>>>> drift
>>>>>
>>>>> Can words drift,
>>>>> (beginning prosaically,
>>>>> informatively, looking
>>>>> for all the world,
>>>>> to be workmanlike,
>>>>> jobbing sentence components)
>>>>> right beneath your eyes,
>>>>> and before you're aware,
>>>>> (through dint of odd
>>>>> placement
>>>>> or line
>>>>> turn)
>>>>> into mood-changers,
>>>>> joy-inspirers,
>>>>> perception-inverters,
>>>>> into poetry?
>>>>>
>>>>> bw
>>>>> 23 .7.15
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>> On 23 Jul 2015, at 12:20 pm, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Hi Bill,
>>>>>>
>>>>>> I like the brackets. Punctuation is there to be worked with (and
>> around,
>>>>> at times). I get how this is working with. Just a thought - and it's
>>>> simply
>>>>> a thought. To move 'into poetry' to the very end and do without 'into
>> the
>>>>> uncanny'.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Cheers,
>>>>>> Jill
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>> On 22/07/2015, at 7:29 AM, Bill Wootton wrote:
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Drifters
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> First drift
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Can words drift
>>>>>>> into poetry,
>>>>>>> (begin prosaically,
>>>>>>> informatively, looking
>>>>>>> for all the world at first,
>>>>>>> like workmanlike,
>>>>>>> jobbing sentence components)
>>>>>>> and then,
>>>>>>> (right under your eyes as it were,
>>>>>>> before you're aware)
>>>>>>> transform
>>>>>>> through dent of odd
>>>>>>> placement
>>>>>>> or line
>>>>>>> turn,
>>>>>>> into thought-provocative
>>>>>>> perception-inverters,
>>>>>>> mood-changers,
>>>>>>> joy inspirers,
>>>>>>> propellers
>>>>>>> into the
>>>>>>> uncanny?
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Second drift
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Can words drift into poetry?
>>>>>>> Beginning prosaically,
>>>>>>> informatively, looking
>>>>>>> for all the world,
>>>>>>> to be workmanlike,
>>>>>>> jobbing sentence components,
>>>>>>> then right beneath your eyes,
>>>>>>> as it were,
>>>>>>> before you're aware,
>>>>>>> transforming,
>>>>>>> through dent of odd
>>>>>>> placement
>>>>>>> or line
>>>>>>> turn,
>>>>>>> into mood-changers,
>>>>>>> joy-inspirers,
>>>>>>> perception-inverters,
>>>>>>> propellers
>>>>>>> into uncanny mind zones?
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> bw
>>>>>>> 22 .7.15
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Preferences, other ideas, people of the poetryetc?
>>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>
>>
>> Douglas Barbour
>> [log in to unmask]
>>
>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2
>> (UofAPress).
>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>
>> Done in by creation itself.
>>
>> I mean the gods. Not us. Well us too.
>> The gods moved into books. Who wrote the books?
>> We wrote the books. In whose dream, then are we dreaming?
>>
>> Robert Kroetsch.
>>
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