Well, the moment is a freaky one to catch, Bill. Think th haiku may be a bit too short. ut I might cut the ‘that of the 2nd line & make it the third…
It’s better for me to catch the whole little cinematic event…
Doug
> On Jun 20, 2018, at 6:24 AM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> Thanks, Sheila, Patrick. It was a wonderful moment in a breakfast bar in
> Aix-en-Provence. I’ve had a few goes at it now, the last, this:
>
> ha.iku
>
>
> a cigarette, unlit,
>
> hiccoughs from her mouth;
>
> laughter overspill.
>
>
> bw
>
> 18.6.18
>
> Bill
>
> On Wed, 20 Jun 2018 at 10:33 am, Patrick McManus <
> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> haha rather like someone I knew who could snatch flies
>>
>> grey morning here
>>
>>
>> On 20/06/2018 07:20, Sheila Murphy wrote:
>>> Very immediate, Bill! Palpable!
>>>
>>> On Tue, Jun 19, 2018, 11:08 PM Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
>>> wrote:
>>>
>>>> sputters up so spontaneously
>>>>
>>>> that from unpursed lips
>>>>
>>>> her unlit cigarette springs
>>>>
>>>> gyrates
>>>>
>>>> lands longitudinally
>>>>
>>>> on her pulsing lap
>>>>
>>>> where with light fist
>>>>
>>>> she snaffles it on the bounce
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> bw
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