Thanks Lawrence
I like to hope I manage that sometimes…
Doug
> On Mar 31, 2017, at 3:01 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> Yes. Take that word out and the whole falls much flatter, regardless of the
> damage done rhythmically. Take out "delicate" and "deliquescent" seems
> quite off, wrong.... but the two together is apt and impressive. At the
> same time the sound play is fine
>
> best
>
> L
>
> On 29 March 2017 at 22:00, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> Doug, this is beautiful, an instant favourite for me of all your poems I
>> have read, not least for your use of deliquescent, a new (to me) and
>> utterly appropriate word here.
>>
>> Bill
>>
>> On Thu, 30 Mar 2017 at 4:50 am, Patrick McManus <
>> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>>> Doug thanks yes we have lost our dark
>>>
>>>
>>> On 29/03/2017 18:01, Douglas Barbour wrote:
>>>> in the cities late at night
>>>> the darkness
>>>> never fully arrives
>>>>
>>>> a complicit light reaches
>>>> into every yard stretches
>>>> along the streets
>>>>
>>>> at some point snow
>>>> a spattered curtain
>>>> adds even more bright
>>>>
>>>> to the always held at bay
>>>> dark & slowly
>>>> begins to outline branches
>>>>
>>>> a delicate & deliquescent
>>>> etching emerging
>>>> to be lost by morning
>>>>
>>>> Douglas Barbour
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>>>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>>>>
>>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
>>> Continuations 2 (UofAPress).
>>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> and as you read
>>>> the sea is turning its dark pages
>>>> turning
>>>> its dark pages.
>>>>
>>>> Denise Levertov
>>>
>>
Douglas Barbour
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Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations 2 (UofAPress).
Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
Listen. If (UofAPress):
and as you read
the sea is turning its dark pages
turning
its dark pages.
Denise Levertov
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