All right, Pat, so a combination of the two. I'll have to get my editing boots on again it seems.
Thanks,
Bill
On 22/07/2015, at 6:21 PM, Patrick McManus wrote:
> Hi Bill liked gist of this -not sure you need brackets-personally I
> preferred the ending to the first version -the second version ending seemed
> to this old soul a bit clunky -maybe it's just me !!cheers P
>
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> Subject: Drifters
>
> Drifters
>
> First drift
>
> Can words drift
> into poetry,
> (begin prosaically,
> informatively, looking
> for all the world at first,
> like workmanlike,
> jobbing sentence components)
> and then,
> (right under your eyes as it were,
> before you're aware)
> transform
> through dent of odd
> placement
> or line
> turn,
> into thought-provocative
> perception-inverters,
> mood-changers,
> joy inspirers,
> propellers
> into the
> uncanny?
>
>
> Second drift
>
> Can words drift into poetry?
> Beginning prosaically,
> informatively, looking
> for all the world,
> to be workmanlike,
> jobbing sentence components,
> then right beneath your eyes,
> as it were,
> before you're aware,
> transforming,
> through dent of odd
> placement
> or line
> turn,
> into mood-changers,
> joy-inspirers,
> perception-inverters,
> propellers
> into uncanny mind zones?
>
> bw
> 22 .7.15
>
> Preferences, other ideas, people of the poetryetc?
>
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