Doug,
I like the unusual quality of the first two lines as a syntactical unit (HD's famous early poem comes to mind). Lines 3-4 evoke the photographic metaphor inherent within The Snapshot Project, the shudder of the waves quickly bringing shutter to mind when juxtaposed with transparency. Nice modulation of 4 consecutive words beginning with c into a cacophony of non-disclosure.
Barry
On Wed, 20 Jul 2011 11:54:52 -0600, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>waves the green
>against bright blue
>
>shudder
>transparency
>
>there's new news on the wind
>storm brewing
>beyond horizon's gravity
>defying clouds
> crowds
>crows
> caw & descend
>in a flurry of non
> disclosure
>
>Douglas Barbour
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>It is natural to speak of your own weaknesses so winsomely they will seem strengths, as if everyone else is inadequate if they do not have your inadequacies.
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> William H. Gass
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