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Doug, I like the unusual quality of the first two lines as a syntactical unit (HD's famous early poem comes to mind). Lines 3-4 evoke the photographic metaphor inherent within The Snapshot Project, the shudder of the waves quickly bringing shutter to mind when juxtaposed with transparency. Nice modulation of 4 consecutive words beginning with c into a cacophony of non-disclosure. Barry On Wed, 20 Jul 2011 11:54:52 -0600, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote: >waves the green >against bright blue > >shudder >transparency > >there's new news on the wind >storm brewing >beyond horizon's gravity >defying clouds > crowds >crows > caw & descend >in a flurry of non > disclosure > >Douglas Barbour >[log in to unmask] > >http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/ >http://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/ > >Latest books: >Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy) >http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664 >Wednesdays' >http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html > >It is natural to speak of your own weaknesses so winsomely they will seem strengths, as if everyone else is inadequate if they do not have your inadequacies. > > William H. Gass