it would need to be more detached to be FGL. :)
KS
2008/5/24 Liz Kirby <[log in to unmask]>:
> I like it, I wonder what Sharon thinks......
>
> Doesnt it sound even more like Lorca now?
>
> Liz
>
> 2008/5/24 kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]>:
>
>> that's pretty much exactly what I was thinking of. good take Judy
>>
>> KS
>>
>> 2008/5/23 judy prince <[log in to unmask]>:
>> > Sharon, taking Kasper's suggestion (the part about fewer "moon" words),
>> I
>> > wondered how it mite change the poem. Let me type in a possible (BTW,
>> the
>> > title establishes who "you" is):
>> >
>> > Flower Moon
>> >
>> > You hide in the rain.
>> > Meadows are wild
>> > with lupine, columbine and phlox.
>> > Tulips and violets open their hearts.
>> >
>> > It is time to plant the corn.
>> > Young squirrels practice mating in the garden,
>> > all four in a tumble of spring,
>> > taking turns being boy, being girl.
>> >
>> > This year you bring sorrow and pain.
>> > Old friends fade; old knees curse* the rain.
>> > Sixty times I have slept beneath you.
>> > Flower Moon, smile on me.
>> >
>> >
>> > Best,
>> >
>> > Judy
>> >
>> > [*I just subbed a non-"ain" word, figuring 3 in one stanza was too many.]
>> >
>> > ----- Original Message ----- From: "sharon brogan" <[log in to unmask]>
>> > To: <[log in to unmask]>
>> > Sent: Thursday, May 22, 2008 3:04 PM
>> > Subject: snapshot poem 21 may 02008
>> >
>> >
>> > Flower Moon
>> >
>> > May Moon, Milk moon, you hide
>> > in the rain. Meadows are wild
>> > with lupine, columbine and phlox.
>> > Tulips and violets open their hearts.
>> >
>> > It is time to plant the corn. Young
>> > squirrels practice mating in the garden,
>> > all four in a tumble of spring, taking
>> > turns being boy, being girl. Flower Moon,
>> >
>> > this year you bring sorrow, and pain. Old
>> > friends fade; old knees complain of the rain.
>> > Corn Planting Moon, sixty times I have slept
>> > beneath you. Milk Moon, smile on me.
>> >
>> > ***************
>> >
>> > *May 19, 9:11 p.m. EDT —* *Full Flower Moon. *Flowers are abundant
>> > everywhere. It was also known as the Full Corn Planting Moon or the Milk
>> > Moon. Since the moon arrives at apogee less than 12 hours later, this
>> will
>> > also be the smallest full moon of 2008. In terms of apparent size, it
>> will
>> > appear 12.3 percent smaller than the full moon of Dec. 12.
>> > *http://www.space.com/spacewatch/080118-ns-moon-names.html*
>> > --
>> >
>> >
>> > ~ SB | http://www.sbpoet.com | =^..^=
>> >
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