I like it, I wonder what Sharon thinks......
Doesnt it sound even more like Lorca now?
Liz
2008/5/24 kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]>:
> that's pretty much exactly what I was thinking of. good take Judy
>
> KS
>
> 2008/5/23 judy prince <[log in to unmask]>:
> > Sharon, taking Kasper's suggestion (the part about fewer "moon" words),
> I
> > wondered how it mite change the poem. Let me type in a possible (BTW,
> the
> > title establishes who "you" is):
> >
> > Flower Moon
> >
> > You hide in the rain.
> > Meadows are wild
> > with lupine, columbine and phlox.
> > Tulips and violets open their hearts.
> >
> > It is time to plant the corn.
> > Young squirrels practice mating in the garden,
> > all four in a tumble of spring,
> > taking turns being boy, being girl.
> >
> > This year you bring sorrow and pain.
> > Old friends fade; old knees curse* the rain.
> > Sixty times I have slept beneath you.
> > Flower Moon, smile on me.
> >
> >
> > Best,
> >
> > Judy
> >
> > [*I just subbed a non-"ain" word, figuring 3 in one stanza was too many.]
> >
> > ----- Original Message ----- From: "sharon brogan" <[log in to unmask]>
> > To: <[log in to unmask]>
> > Sent: Thursday, May 22, 2008 3:04 PM
> > Subject: snapshot poem 21 may 02008
> >
> >
> > Flower Moon
> >
> > May Moon, Milk moon, you hide
> > in the rain. Meadows are wild
> > with lupine, columbine and phlox.
> > Tulips and violets open their hearts.
> >
> > It is time to plant the corn. Young
> > squirrels practice mating in the garden,
> > all four in a tumble of spring, taking
> > turns being boy, being girl. Flower Moon,
> >
> > this year you bring sorrow, and pain. Old
> > friends fade; old knees complain of the rain.
> > Corn Planting Moon, sixty times I have slept
> > beneath you. Milk Moon, smile on me.
> >
> > ***************
> >
> > *May 19, 9:11 p.m. EDT —* *Full Flower Moon. *Flowers are abundant
> > everywhere. It was also known as the Full Corn Planting Moon or the Milk
> > Moon. Since the moon arrives at apogee less than 12 hours later, this
> will
> > also be the smallest full moon of 2008. In terms of apparent size, it
> will
> > appear 12.3 percent smaller than the full moon of Dec. 12.
> > *http://www.space.com/spacewatch/080118-ns-moon-names.html*
> > --
> >
> >
> > ~ SB | http://www.sbpoet.com | =^..^=
> >
>
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