Nice view, Andrew, & I just took 'pedalodiums' as something to work
out, but obviously bike-like. Wondered though at the passives in lines
2 & 3; can't you just cut the 'are's? A 'snap' being a stoptime thing
anyway, & the implied movement pst &/or present still there...?
Doug
Doug
On 14-Mar-07, at 12:21 AM, andrew burke wrote:
> the washing machine whirls to a close
> Linfen buildings are buffed and dried
> bicycles are beautifully spoken
> sparkling ladies glide by
> on the back of
> proudly polished pedalodiums
> ridden by bright-faced gentlemen
> with Colgate-white teeth
> gleaming in shining sunlight
> down promenades lined
> by leafy elms past
> milkpond lakes skirted
> by weeping willows ...
>
> from a Hills Hoist hangs
> those stubborn Chinese stains
> - corruption and pride
>
>
>
>
> --
> Andrew
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