Mainly my fingers reverse letters, just about once every two words…
Where are the youngsters to tell us they make no mistakes?
Doug
On Aug 15, 2014, at 12:26 AM, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Of recent for me I mix words up a lot -must be a whole area for writing
> there - related to my loss of hearing where what I understand is far from
> what was actually said makes things interesting -could they really have said
> that before replying !!
> P rambling
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
> Behalf Of Max Richards
> Sent: 15 August 2014 02:00
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: 'Pupils'
>
> I used to be accurate and correct.
>
> Yesterday I wrote there for their, and it took a wee while to remember which
> is which.
>
> Max
>
> On 15 Aug 2014, at 10:31 am, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> I know, I know, Doug. You're talking to the typo king. I was just being a
> smarty poo. Ironically, there is only one person in the world who makes no
> typos. He be Max.
>>
>> Bill
>>
>>> On 15 Aug 2014, at 7:59 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>
>>> No, just my fingers, never getting the typing straight
>>>
>>> sorru MaX
>>>
>>> Doug
>>>> On Aug 14, 2014, at 3:17 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>>>>
>>>> It's alright, Ma was only bleeding.
>>>>
>>>>> On 15 Aug 2014, at 12:51 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>> Well, I'd argue that Ma was waxing just a little ironic there,
>>>>> Andrew.
>>>>>
>>>>> Doug
>>>>>> On Aug 13, 2014, at 6:51 PM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Yes, great poem, Max. But I dispute the last statement, 'beauty is
>>>>>> youth, youth beauty'. In this old town, there's beauty up and down
>>>>>> the main street, getting out of dusty old utes and paddock-scented
>>>>>> 4x4s - there's even a particular beauty in gnarled old trees
>>>>>> leaning out over Murray River. But, of course, there's also a
>>>>>> frisky beauty in the girls flirting with the boys before they all
>>>>>> race off to the big smoke ... Our optometrist is here but twice a week
> and she takes shit from no man!
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Andrew
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>> On 14 August 2014 09:53, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Yes I like the beauty zeroing down to 'the woman's' pupils, Max.
>>>>>>> The light and dark works well too. Not sure of
>>>>>>> enchantment/enhancement but unlike you, Pat, happy with the rounding
> off with a bit of a Keatsian flourish.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Bill
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>> On 14 Aug 2014, at 1:48 am, Douglas Barbour
>>>>>>>>> <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>>>>> wrote:
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> AH, but Max, your 'beauty' comes on the heels of a bunch of
>>>>>>>> such terms,
>>>>>>> which as they pile up become somewhat concrete, it feels, that
>>>>>>> being the mystery of language at work. And I really enjoy the sly
>>>>>>> pseudo-self-deprecation at work in the poem, its humour...
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> Doug
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>> On Aug 13, 2014, at 4:35 AM, Max Richards
>>>>>>>>> <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>>>> wrote:
>>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>> Pupils
>>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>> The woman at the opticians,
>>>>>>>>> who takes me into her dark room for intimate transactions, is
>>>>>>>>> exquisite - fine-featured,
>>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>> slow to smile, elegant of hand
>>>>>>>>> and hip. She shines her light
>>>>>>>>> and herself deep into my eyes.
>>>>>>>>> saying 'you have small pupils'!
>>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>> (My lack of success with women
>>>>>>>>> explained by yet another reason!) I begin a sly campaign to
>>>>>>>>> survey her pupils' fluctuation -
>>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>> now large in the dark, now less in the well-lit corridor,
>>>>>>>>> smallest out in the public space where frames are chosen at
>>>>>>>>> great expense
>>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>> to enhance one's chances
>>>>>>>>> of glamorous enchantment.
>>>>>>>>> She's put on spectacles herself, as if her looks need some
>>>>>>>>> enhancement.
>>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>> Fair girl, unframed is best. Fair young men, fair children -
>>>>>>>>> smile on.
>>>>>>>>> Our eyes are all on you, as yours are on each other. We were
>>>>>>>>> young once,
>>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>> though scarcely knew it. Old now, leaning back - yearning back
>>>>>>>>> - at our sunset hour it dawns on us: Beauty is youth, youth
>>>>>>>>> beauty, - that is all we know on earth.
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> Douglas Barbour
>>>>>>>> [log in to unmask]
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
>>>>>>>> Continuation
>>>>>>> 2 (UofAPress).
>>>>>>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> Something else is out there
>>>>>>>> godamnit
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> And I want to hear it
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> C.D.Wright
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> --
>>>>>> Andrew
>>>>>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
>>>>>
>>>>> Douglas Barbour
>>>>> [log in to unmask]
>>>>>
>>>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
>>>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>>>
>>>>> Something else is out there
>>>>> godamnit
>>>>>
>>>>> And I want to hear it
>>>>>
>>>>> C.D.Wright
>>>
>>> Douglas Barbour
>>> [log in to unmask]
>>>
>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation
> 2 (UofAPress).
>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>
>>> Something else is out there
>>> godamnit
>>>
>>> And I want to hear it
>>>
>>> C.D.Wright
>>>
>
Douglas Barbour
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Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
Something else is out there
godamnit
And I want to hear it
C.D.Wright
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