This does a much better job, Bill…
All that sag… but still the compensation -- out there
Doug
On Aug 13, 2014, at 5:57 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Secondary Compensations?
>
> Compensations
>
> Cheeks hang baggy.
> Face spills onto pillow.
> No close bone cling.
>
> Shoulder flesh sags
> like a Brahman cow's.
> Muscles think before flexing.
>
> But choughs still fan,
> fuss and fossick.
> And tonight,
>
> so they say,
> the Moon
> will be Super.
>
> bw
> 14.8.14
>
>> On 14 Aug 2014, at 1:45 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>> Just back form a trip, & tired this ay em, but I kinda have to agree with Max, Bill. Is there a way to suggest all that beauty without naming it such?
>>
>> And ‘sockets’ doesn’t work, really…
>>
>> Though I certainly get the main thrust of the thing; living it…
>>
>> Doug
>>> On Aug 13, 2014, at 4:33 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>
>>> poetryetc at this time of year is always quiet, I seem to remember -
>>>
>>> holiday and travel time for the northern hemisphere…
>>>
>>> Otherwise I expect by now someone would have wondered aloud whether
>>> pouchily
>>> and
>>> springlessly
>>> were maybe uncomfortable coinages from Bill.
>>> But let them pass…
>>>
>>> I have some difficulty with eye sockets changing
>>> probably because for me a socket is made of bone.
>>> The turn at line nine is welcome, yet -
>>> eight lines of ‘concreteness’ seem to me to call for a turn
>>> that does not lapse into a big abstraction -
>>> Hopkins poems have similar problems shifting from the experiential to the abstract.
>>> Is there a way for ‘beauty’ to be held over until we can sense what might bring it to mind.
>>> Lines ten to twelve don’t quite do this.
>>> Choughs? fussing and fossicking?
>>> sinister birds with sharp beaks.
>>> For you, Bill, but not for me.
>>>
>>> (Earlier today in the park I noticed a dead magpie - handsome but very dead.)
>>>
>>> Oddly I am about to post a verse snap with ‘beauty’ in it.
>>>
>>> Max in Melbourne
>>>
>>>> On 13 Aug 2014, at 8:04 am, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>>
>>>> Compensations
>>>>
>>>> Cheeks hang baggy.
>>>> Face spills onto pillow.
>>>> Eye sockets fold and droop
>>>> forgetting former close bone cling
>>>>
>>>> Skin sags pouchily from shoulder
>>>> bone, as if from Brahman cow.
>>>> Muscles think before flexing,
>>>> withdraw springlessly.
>>>>
>>>> Yet beauty still bounces,
>>>> choughs fuss and fossick.
>>>> And tonight - so they say,
>>>> The moon will be Super.
>>>>
>>>> bw
>>
>> Douglas Barbour
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>>
>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>
>> Something else is out there
>> godamnit
>>
>> And I want to hear it
>>
>> C.D.Wright
>>
>
Douglas Barbour
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Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
Something else is out there
godamnit
And I want to hear it
C.D.Wright
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