well I would ask what verse is like
and with respect it's nothing but I and eye
I should say that now I have moved this from a problem folder to a
gathering of work, a possible collection in the future, it does seem to be
an outlier in many ways - outlier a bit in the way that stats uses the term
L
On 14 May 2014 17:58, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Ah, well.
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> I'd ask whether or not you want to paragraph more or find a way to make it
> more like verse?
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> And do you want any mention of the I (eye) in there?
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> D
> On May 14, 2014, at 10:46 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
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> > actually I smudged it a bit more only this morning
> > it's really quite old and Ive been leaving some of the problems that I
> > found in this - in that I was avoiding the same (generic) problems in
> other
> > pieces
> > for some reason they are what I am working on now
> > that isnt what I planned to be doing now but that's the way it is
> > most of the problematic pieces are being binned as I realise or decide
> that
> > the problems are evasions, that the work isnt really that good!
> > this is okayish, I think
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> > L
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> > On 14 May 2014 17:29, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> >> A sharp sketch, L, & fixed, now, in time...
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> >> D
> >> On May 14, 2014, at 7:07 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
> >> wrote:
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> >>> palms queues
> >>>
> >>> a worried man, perhaps, looking over his glasses at me, a short while
> >> ago,
> >>> when I sat in this, which, I suppose, is a reception chair
> >>>
> >>> looking at money; *seems* worried; just now; cubic inches of notes in
> >>> dulled multicolour; and an adding machine, which he taps at random
> >>>
> >>> my love, drawn and tired, this and that looking, a bird
> >>>
> >>> woman with chemical-gold hair and silver shoes
> >>>
> >>> anxious woman in smart black pleated skirt and white silk blouse;
> >> handsome;
> >>> wedding ring; stockings -- it's thirty-nine degrees -- sandles with one
> >> and
> >>> a half inch heels; face taut with temporary concern showing the
> >> structure;
> >>> gold plate bangles; thirty-five perhaps; but, now, as she turns, and as
> >> she
> >>> pulls at the door, more likely forty, and may be more
> >>>
> >>> tall man in jeans
> >>>
> >>> woman in dress of the geometric period
> >>>
> >>> on the wall, great bank notes of the past, I suppose, in frames; visa
> >>> travellers cheques no apostrophe; hand-written note in Greek saying
> >> closed
> >>>
> >>
> >> Douglas Barbour
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> >> http://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
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> >> Latest books:
> >> Continuations & Continuations 2 (with Sheila E Murphy)
> >> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=962
> >> Recording Dates
> >> (Rubicon Press)
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> >> would you
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> >> care to be more
> >> precise about whatever
> >> it is you are
> >> saying, I said
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> >> Bill Manhire
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> Douglas Barbour
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> Latest books:
> Continuations & Continuations 2 (with Sheila E Murphy)
> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=962
> Recording Dates
> (Rubicon Press)
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> would you
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> precise about whatever
> it is you are
> saying, I said
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> Bill Manhire
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