Yeah: maybe a bit too large, but a break works, like a stanza one....
This one does the waves nicely...
Doug
On 2012-01-22, at 2:46 AM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
> that space in the middle is the contribution of a processor or processors
> somewhere
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> it's quite a nice idea, but it maybe too large -- processors have no sense
> of animal reality -- and I had thought I entered a line break
>
> L
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> ---------------------------- Original Message ----------------------------
> Subject: The Bar between St Agnes and The Gugh submerging : from Wingletang
> From: "Lawrence Upton" <[log in to unmask]>
> Date: Sun, January 22, 2012 08:59
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> Between the large waves, top sand dries --
> its colour fading; shinily --
> but less so as waves overtake
> each other, darkening ground, ocean
> depth
> visually rendered
> expressed momentarily
> an
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> exposed
> sea either side raised up,
> spilling,
> flan case disintegrating, fills
> annihilating weak images
> metaphor and form and memories
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> the east of the bar churning
> fleetingly below enveloping sea’s
> gush,
> sand saturated,
> water almost
> continuous,
> cover incomplete
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