ah, rereading, I can see the double 'its' doing what it does...
(although I might put a double or triple space in there....)
Doug
On 2-May-08, at 12:13 AM, David Bircumshaw wrote:
> Hi Doug
>
> well as Judy rightly pointed out the climactic point is three lines
> before the end. After that the language (deliberately) becomes broken,
> agrammatic: 'like glass' is in italics (tho' not here!) to signify
> that switch. The questions of the need for the repeated possessive for
> the attributes of the First Cause of the Kabbalists is a moot one and
> may require an appeal to a Higher Authority (!)
>
> (though underneath the esoteric notion of the shattered cosmic
> chandelier lies a simple physical one of broken glass strewn about a
> pavement or street)
>
> Best
>
> Dave
>
> 2008/5/1 Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>:
>> A sharp view, Dave. Do you need the 'is' (written 'its') in the
>> final line?
>>
>> Doug
>>
>> On 30-Apr-08, at 1:55 AM, David Bircumshaw wrote:
>>
>>
>>> Yours
>>> "this they call the doctrine of the shattered vessels"
>>>
>>
>> Douglas Barbour
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>>
>> There are no wrong notes!
>>
>> Thelonious Sphere Monk
>>
>
>
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Latest books:
Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
Wednesdays'
http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
There are no wrong notes!
Thelonious Sphere Monk
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