Hi Doug
well as Judy rightly pointed out the climactic point is three lines
before the end. After that the language (deliberately) becomes broken,
agrammatic: 'like glass' is in italics (tho' not here!) to signify
that switch. The questions of the need for the repeated possessive for
the attributes of the First Cause of the Kabbalists is a moot one and
may require an appeal to a Higher Authority (!)
(though underneath the esoteric notion of the shattered cosmic
chandelier lies a simple physical one of broken glass strewn about a
pavement or street)
Best
Dave
2008/5/1 Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>:
> A sharp view, Dave. Do you need the 'is' (written 'its') in the final line?
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> Doug
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> On 30-Apr-08, at 1:55 AM, David Bircumshaw wrote:
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> > Yours
> > "this they call the doctrine of the shattered vessels"
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