A strong poem about frailty, maybe, written on/in cyberspace ... I'd ignore
the sonnet concept when editing it (if you do) and just flail away at
anything extraneous. The tone and syntactical shape of the first verse is a
good measure for the rest of it, imho.
Two prompts, one poem: good scheme.
Andrew
On 22/01/2008, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> ... I'm not sure what's allowed. I tried to respond to two prompts
> with one poem: write a sonnet, and write about the frailty of human
> effort:
>
> Ephemeral Sonnet
>
> We write on water, we poets. Most of
> us. Some write on sand, brief calligraphy
> for seagulls, shore-birds and the slow inev-
> itable tide. A few write to stain the sea,
>
> so intense, the color of their ink salts
> the words of their inheritors years
> beyond their own decline. It's not their fault
> that rules and ideologies emerge
>
> poem by innocent poem. Some writers
> strive to obscure the mysterious; some try
> to reveal the obvious. Some are rhymers;
> some are not. Some leap at the chance to fly.
>
> In hopes they will endure, some write their odes
> on stone. Stone is hard. But even stone erodes.
>
>
>
> Not as fun as Halvard's -- but is it a sonnet? If not, what must I do
> to make it one?
>
> --
>
>
> ~ SB | http://www.sbpoet.com | =^..^=
>
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Andrew
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