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From: "andrew burke" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Monday, December 31, 2007 6:59 PM
Subject: Re: Wishing a happy and wildly sensual New Year to all
poetryetceterists.
Fred, happy nude ear to you too. I liked your poem, but felt for drama's
sake, you might like to swap the position of verses one and two. 'Darkness.
And then her presence in the room,' is a clincher of a first line, imho.
Andrew
Damn good idea. Thanks, Andrew.
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