Alison
I wasn't as bothered by the poem as those other two, but I do think
that the angel creeping in gets in the way a bit & would change this
line:
>>> Angel, how numb your shoulders are,
to 'how numb your shoulders,'
then to the next.
And maybe think, as you say you are doing, about some other line
breaks...
Doug
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I saw three ships
come sailing in
on Christmas Day
in the morning
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