Thanks for your snowsome regards, Doug. Thankfully, the weather has settled
for a few days after yesterday's wild winds, heat and dry storm. We lost a
few branches on oaks and a big candlebark gum but none hit the house at
least. Just a bit of tidying up to do.
I think Andrew is onto something with his suggested excision of slush in
your poem, no matter what you saw. It reads better.
Bill
On Fri, 22 Nov 2019 at 3:47 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
wrote:
> Thanks everyone; it was what ir was as I drove along. I do try to see what
> can be seen…
>
> Winter has come, & some of that dusting remains on the bushes the sun
> can’t reach..
>
> Bill, I wish we could send some snow to help with the fires…; which look
> ever more terrible each time the news carries another story.
>
> Doug
>
> > On Nov 21, 2019, at 7:46 AM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > I like it without 'turned to slush' ... (less is more, kind of)
> >
> > Andrew
> >
> > On Thu, 21 Nov 2019 at 18:22, Patrick McManus <
> > [log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> >> Doug the turning to slush after such a bright sparkling start made me
> >> sad -cheers P
> >>
> >> On 20/11/2019 22:07, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> >>> that light dust of snow stuck
> >>> to every twig & branch
> >>>
> >>> glows in the lowering sun
> >>>
> >>> below turned to slush
> >>>
> >>> it dulls the asphalt
> >>> lost in shadows
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> Douglas Barbour
> >>> [log in to unmask]
> >>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> >>>
> >>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> >> Continuations 2 (UofAPress).
> >>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> >>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> Swept snow, Li Po,
> >>> by dawn’s 40-watt moon
> >>> to the road that hies to office
> >>> away from home.
> >>>
> >>> Lorine Niedecker
> >>>
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> Douglas Barbour
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> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
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> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
> 2 (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> Listen. If (UofAPress):
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> by dawn’s 40-watt moon
> to the road that hies to office
> away from home.
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> Lorine Niedecker
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