Thanks, Sheila.
Bill
On Thu, 19 Apr 2018 at 9:50 am, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
wrote:
> Bill, I am liking this version very much! Bravo! Sheila
>
> On Wed, Apr 18, 2018, 4:14 PM Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
> > Thanks, Doug.
> >
> > The second part now looks like this. My wife pointed out that a fox’s
> tail
> > cannot ‘splay’ as such.
> >
> > An otherworld visitor
> >
> > daintily trotting
> >
> >
> >
> > from eucalypt shade
> >
> > down earth's stony path
> >
> >
> >
> > swishless tail almost
> >
> > independent accomplice
> >
> >
> >
> > From where does all that
> >
> > red swagger spring?
> >
> >
> > Bill
> >
> > On Thu, 19 Apr 2018 at 12:32 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> > wrote:
> >
> > > Bill
> > >
> > > I agree with Jill about the first stanza really boring its magic, & I’d
> > > get rid of the doggie reference in the 2nd, for one thing it has to be
> a
> > > small dog, right?. The speed of the turns marking the fox’s movements
> is
> > > neatly done.
> > >
> > > & Jill, thanks for the references.
> > >
> > > Doug
> > >
> > > > On Apr 17, 2018, at 11:19 PM, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> > > >
> > > > Also, Bill, meant to mention that a good friend of mine, the Scots
> but
> > > > now South Australian poet, Alison Flett, has written a series of
> poems
> > > > about foxes.
> > > >
> > > > This was the only one I could find available online:
> > > >
> > > > http://littlewindowspress.com/index.php/fox-1-umvelt/
> > > >
> > > > Cheers,
> > > > Jill
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > ________________________
> > > > Jill Jones
> > > > www.jilljones.com.au
> > > >
> > > > Latest book: Brink, Five Islands Press
> > > > http://fiveislandspress.com/catalogue/brink-jill-jones
> > > >
> > > > ----- Original Message -----
> > > > From: "Poetryetc: poetry and poetics"
> > > > To:
> > > > Cc:
> > > > Sent:Wed, 18 Apr 2018 09:35:54 +1000
> > > > Subject:Fox
> > > >
> > > > *Fox*
> > > >
> > > > 1
> > > >
> > > > The thing is,
> > > >
> > > > can you even be sure
> > > >
> > > > you saw it?
> > > >
> > > > That even-haunched
> > > >
> > > > cool stepper,
> > > >
> > > > intent
> > > >
> > > > as a gunslinger.
> > > >
> > > > Now definitely
> > > >
> > > > not there.
> > > >
> > > > 2
> > > >
> > > > Despite dog dimensions
> > > >
> > > > he moves undoglike-ly
> > > >
> > > > An otherworld visitor
> > > >
> > > > daintily trotting
> > > >
> > > > from eucalypt shade
> > > >
> > > > down earth's stony path
> > > >
> > > > splayed tail almost
> > > >
> > > > independent accomplice
> > > >
> > > > From where does all that
> > > >
> > > > red swagger spring?
> > > >
> > > > bw
> > > >
> > > > 18.4.18
> > > >
> > >
> > > Douglas Barbour
> > > [log in to unmask]
> > > https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> > >
> > > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> Continuations
> > > 2 (UofAPress).
> > > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> > > Listen. If (UofAPress):
> > >
> > >
> > > There is no real
> > > world, my friends.
> > > Why not, then
> > > let the stars
> > > shine in our bones?
> > >
> > > Robert Kroetsch
> > >
> >
>
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