Bill, I am liking this version very much! Bravo! Sheila
On Wed, Apr 18, 2018, 4:14 PM Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Thanks, Doug.
>
> The second part now looks like this. My wife pointed out that a fox’s tail
> cannot ‘splay’ as such.
>
> An otherworld visitor
>
> daintily trotting
>
>
>
> from eucalypt shade
>
> down earth's stony path
>
>
>
> swishless tail almost
>
> independent accomplice
>
>
>
> From where does all that
>
> red swagger spring?
>
>
> Bill
>
> On Thu, 19 Apr 2018 at 12:32 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
> > Bill
> >
> > I agree with Jill about the first stanza really boring its magic, & I’d
> > get rid of the doggie reference in the 2nd, for one thing it has to be a
> > small dog, right?. The speed of the turns marking the fox’s movements is
> > neatly done.
> >
> > & Jill, thanks for the references.
> >
> > Doug
> >
> > > On Apr 17, 2018, at 11:19 PM, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> > >
> > > Also, Bill, meant to mention that a good friend of mine, the Scots but
> > > now South Australian poet, Alison Flett, has written a series of poems
> > > about foxes.
> > >
> > > This was the only one I could find available online:
> > >
> > > http://littlewindowspress.com/index.php/fox-1-umvelt/
> > >
> > > Cheers,
> > > Jill
> > >
> > >
> > > ________________________
> > > Jill Jones
> > > www.jilljones.com.au
> > >
> > > Latest book: Brink, Five Islands Press
> > > http://fiveislandspress.com/catalogue/brink-jill-jones
> > >
> > > ----- Original Message -----
> > > From: "Poetryetc: poetry and poetics"
> > > To:
> > > Cc:
> > > Sent:Wed, 18 Apr 2018 09:35:54 +1000
> > > Subject:Fox
> > >
> > > *Fox*
> > >
> > > 1
> > >
> > > The thing is,
> > >
> > > can you even be sure
> > >
> > > you saw it?
> > >
> > > That even-haunched
> > >
> > > cool stepper,
> > >
> > > intent
> > >
> > > as a gunslinger.
> > >
> > > Now definitely
> > >
> > > not there.
> > >
> > > 2
> > >
> > > Despite dog dimensions
> > >
> > > he moves undoglike-ly
> > >
> > > An otherworld visitor
> > >
> > > daintily trotting
> > >
> > > from eucalypt shade
> > >
> > > down earth's stony path
> > >
> > > splayed tail almost
> > >
> > > independent accomplice
> > >
> > > From where does all that
> > >
> > > red swagger spring?
> > >
> > > bw
> > >
> > > 18.4.18
> > >
> >
> > Douglas Barbour
> > [log in to unmask]
> > https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> >
> > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
> > 2 (UofAPress).
> > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> > Listen. If (UofAPress):
> >
> >
> > There is no real
> > world, my friends.
> > Why not, then
> > let the stars
> > shine in our bones?
> >
> > Robert Kroetsch
> >
>
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