Thanks, Doug. I was thinking, in rewriting, of your hostility to the
pependicular pronoun. I changed from feign to feint because I wanted to
suggest the actual false movement.
Bill
On Thu, 29 Mar 2018 at 1:59 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
wrote:
> Ah, there’s some local knowledge I at least dont know about at work in
> some remarks here, Bill, I like the new first line better. Think ‘feign’ is
> just fine. Interesting to get wordy honesty in talking about body
> dishonesty.
>
> Doug
>
> > On Mar 28, 2018, at 3:19 AM, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > .. and let's not mention the c word either - though you can't tell me
> > lehmann wasn't in on it, I mean ... truly.
> >
> > J
> > ________________________
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> >
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> > ----- Original Message -----
> > From: "Poetryetc: poetry and poetics"
> > To:
> > Cc:
> > Sent:Wed, 28 Mar 2018 08:38:44 +0000
> > Subject:Re: Body dishonesty
> >
> > ... and we won’t mention tampering, Patrick.
> >
> > Bill
> >
> > On Wed, 28 Mar 2018 at 7:24 pm, Patrick McManus <
> > [log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> >> Thanks Bill all that deception is tiring!!
> >>
> >>
> >> On 28/03/2018 06:02, Bill Wootton wrote:
> >>> Thanks Jill and Sheila. I suppose, Jill, it came from the
> > tampering
> >> fiasco
> >>> somewhere in my mind. Not sure that feign was the write word,
> > settled for
> >>> feint in my second version this afternoon. Body dishonesty,
> > Sheila, is
> >> the
> >>> crux of it but I’m not sure this warrants the title. I want it
> > to lead to
> >>> that.
> >>>
> >>> No stomach for playing sport
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> Not willing or able
> >>>
> >>> to do what is required
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> First noticed this
> >>>
> >>> around ten years old
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> trying to tackle from behind
> >>>
> >>> an eight year old in the backyard
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> who scooped down
> >>>
> >>> on the run
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> made as if
> >>>
> >>> to pick up the footy
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> Hands nowhere near it
> >>>
> >>> when I pinned his arms
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> He bellowed in outrage
> >>>
> >>> How did he do that
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> Holding the man
> >>>
> >>> it used to be called
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> Racquet games too
> >>>
> >>> require a big swing
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> then looking like you’re
> >>>
> >>> going to plant that sucker
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> deep in the backhand court
> >>>
> >>> before adjusting
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> and plonking it short
> >>>
> >>> disguising the shot
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> the object being
> >>>
> >>> to feint
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> deceive your opponent
> >>>
> >>> physically lie
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> Skills are handy
> >>>
> >>> and stamina
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> strength and agility
> >>>
> >>> but deception is key
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> Confidence, timing
> >>>
> >>> but ultimately
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> you must be capable
> >>>
> >>> again and again
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> of body
> >>>
> >>> dishonesty
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> which I can’t
> >>>
> >>> sustain
> >>>
> >>>
>
> Douglas Barbour
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>
> the way of what fell
> the lies
> like the petals
> falling drop
> delicately
>
> Phyllis Webb
>
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