Bill,
I prefer your revised version. Couldn't detect within your original any reason for "abandoning reason", as it were.
Barry
On Wed, 23 Aug 2017 09:18:38 +0000, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>Thanks Andrew, Barry.
>
>Like this, Barry?
>
>Not the whole reason
>Not an identical half
>But a proportion of the reason
>a lesser proportion you would think
>but in fact the swaying reason
>
>Half the reason
>you get out of bed each morning
>maybe both half-reasons:
>to have the chance to re-collapse
>Isn't that reasonable?
>
>Bill
>
>On Wed, 23 Aug 2017 at 6:35 pm, Barry Alpert <
>[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> Bill,
>>
>> Why abandon the pattern of ending alternative lines with "reason" when
>> lines 8 and 10 could be revised to end with it (or "reasonable")?
>>
>> Barry
>>
>>
>> On Wed, 23 Aug 2017 10:57:25 +0800, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
>>
>> >Thanks, Bill. I simply enjoyed it.
>> >
>> >Andrew
>> >
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>> >On 23 August 2017 at 10:44, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
>> >
>> >> Thanks, Patrick, Doug for your responses to my apparently half-reasonble
>> >> poem.
>> >>
>> >> Bill
>> >>
>> >> On Wed, 23 Aug 2017 at 4:19 AM, Patrick McManus <
>> >> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
>> >>
>> >> > Hi Bill thanks for snap to me each verse is a separate poem -I
>> >> > especially like the second one sums it up(for me)
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> > On 22/08/2017 15:31, Douglas Barbour wrote:
>> >> > > Clear that space!
>> >> > >
>> >> > > A thought for the day, Bill…
>> >> > >
>> >> > > Doug
>> >> > >> On Aug 22, 2017, at 5:51 AM, Bill Wootton <
>> [log in to unmask]>
>> >> > wrote:
>> >> > >>
>> >> > >> Not the whole reason
>> >> > >> Not an identical half
>> >> > >> But a proportion of the reason
>> >> > >> a lesser proportion you would think
>> >> > >> but in fact the swaying reason
>> >> > >>
>> >> > >> Half the reason
>> >> > >> you get out of bed each morning
>> >> > >> is so you have somewhere
>> >> > >> to collapse into that night
>> >> > >> isn't it
>> >> > >>
>> >> > >> bw
>> >> > > Douglas Barbour
>> >> > > [log in to unmask]
>> >> > > https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>> >> > >
>> >> > > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
>> >> > Continuations 2 (UofAPress).
>> >> > > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>> >> > > Listen. If (UofAPress):
>> >> > >
>> >> > >
>> >> > >
>> >> > >
>> >> > > There was the usual amount of corruption, intimidation, and rioting.
>> >> > >
>> >> > > Sir Charles Petrie
>> >> >
>> >>
>> >
>> >
>> >
>> >--
>> >Andrew
>> >http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
>> >Books available through Walleah Press
>> >http://walleahpress.com.au
>>
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