I like the way the memory feels at home in Australia, Andrew, placing it there. And also enjoyed 'the fallen flag of memory’; but ordered at the hyphen in 'pick-up’ (as I nitpick)…
Doug
> On Aug 31, 2017, at 6:06 AM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> I don't hear it as 'clunky', Patrick. But there again we have different
> accents, don't we, so maybe it clunks along in yours! Thanks for the
> response.
>
> Andrew
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> On 31 August 2017 at 17:39, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
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>> ah yes capturing these memories -enjoy late winter sunshine
>>
>> fallen flag of memory -is a bit clunky??
>>
>>
>>
>> On 31/08/2017 06:35, Andrew Burke wrote:
>>
>>> It’s a strong breeze
>>>
>>> so my Kerouac shirt falls
>>>
>>> to a crumpled red-checked mound
>>>
>>> on the green grass. A honey-eater
>>>
>>> alights on the grevillea near the Hills Hoist –
>>>
>>> I smile as I pick-up the fallen flag of memory –
>>>
>>> so much excitement and admiration
>>>
>>> in my teenage, years, so much sadness
>>>
>>> when he died incomplete and still
>>>
>>> at mother’s. Honey-eater flies off.
>>>
>>> I hang the shirt
>>>
>>> with its motley neighbours: no
>>>
>>> business shirts or teacher’s garb.
>>>
>>> Retired now, a happy septuagenarian
>>>
>>> writing in late winter sunshine,
>>>
>>> pen to paper like Jack wrote
>>>
>>> furiously in his notebooks.
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>
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