Thanks all ... Just a little more attention improved it a lot! A lesson for
me in future snaps ...
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On 24 June 2017 at 05:48, patrick mcmanus <[log in to unmask]>
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>
> Cheers Andrew enjoyed Patrick
>
>
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> -------- Original message --------
> From: Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> Date: 23/06/2017 15:50 (GMT+00:00)
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: snap - cold
>
> Yes, a sharper seeing there now, Andrew, how the past walks with him there…
>
> Doug
> > On Jun 22, 2017, at 8:53 PM, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >
> > Always a pleasure, Andrew!
> >
> > On Jun 22, 2017 7:15 PM, "Andrew Burke" <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> >> Exactly, Sheila - that's how his life goes. Thank you for that
> perceptive
> >> reading.
> >>
> >> Andrew
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> >> On 23 June 2017 at 09:46, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >>
> >>> I like this, Andrew. It brings forward a kind of present tense that
> does
> >>> not release its past.
> >>>
> >>> On Thu, Jun 22, 2017 at 6:21 PM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]>
> >>> wrote:
> >>>
> >>>> Just now I passed
> >>>> your past address,
> >>>> a hollow among
> >>>> bushes by the railway.
> >>>>
> >>>> Now you live
> >>>> in the former
> >>>> half-way house
> >>>> yet walk city streets
> >>>> like the homeless
> >>>> you once lived among
> >>>>
> >>>> the pavement
> >>>> alleys and buildings
> >>>> somehow still
> >>>> shape your life
> >>>>
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> >>>> On 22 June 2017 at 23:15, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> >> wrote:
> >>>>
> >>>>> Not quite that bad, Andrew, but I also noticed that ‘passed’, &
> >> wonder
> >>>> how
> >>>>> you might either find another line to make 2 couplets out of that
> >>> tercet,
> >>>>> or else not worry about stanza breaks at all, at least so ordered
> >> then
> >>>>> broken once. The observation keeps.
> >>>>>
> >>>>> Doug
> >>>>>> On Jun 22, 2017, at 5:35 AM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]>
> >>>> wrote:
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>> Yes, it's shit Bill. I'll tighten it and fiddle with 'passed' and
> >>>> 'past'
> >>>>>> ... An unedited snap from my busy brain :-)
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>> Andrew
> >>>>>>
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> >>>>>>
> >>>>>> On 22 June 2017 at 18:19, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> >>>> wrote:
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>>> Line one's 'passed' is odd to me, Andrew. And why the tercet among
> >>> the
> >>>>>>> couplets? Otherwise this is of interest, the idea of shapes'
> >> effect
> >>> on
> >>>>>>> lives.
> >>>>>>>
> >>>>>>> Bill
> >>>>>>>
> >>>>>>> On Thu, 22 Jun 2017 at 2:14 PM, Andrew Burke <
> >> [log in to unmask]>
> >>>>> wrote:
> >>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>> I drive passed
> >>>>>>>> your past address
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>> a hollow among
> >>>>>>>> bushes by the railway
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>> now you live
> >>>>>>>> full time
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>> in the former
> >>>>>>>> half-way house
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>> yet walk the city streets
> >>>>>>>> like the homeless
> >>>>>>>> you once lived among
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>> the pavement
> >>>>>>>> alleys and buildings
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>> somehow shape
> >>>>>>>> your life
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>> --
> >>>>>>>> Andrew
> >>>>>>>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> >>>>>>>> Books available through Walleah Press
> >>>>>>>> http://walleahpress.com.au
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>> <
> >>>>>>>> https://www.avast.com/sig-email?utm_medium=email&utm_
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> >>>>>>>>
> >>>>>>>
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>> --
> >>>>>> Andrew
> >>>>>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> >>>>>> Books available through Walleah Press
> >>>>>> http://walleahpress.com.au
> >>>>>
> >>>>> Douglas Barbour
> >>>>> [log in to unmask]
> >>>>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> >>>>>
> >>>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> >>> Continuations
> >>>>> 2 (UofAPress).
> >>>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> >>>>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
> >>>>>
> >>>>>
> >>>>> I go down to the Twilight Arcade
> >>>>> and watch the Martian invaders,
> >>>>> already appalled by our language,
> >>>>> pointing at what they want.
> >>>>>
> >>>>> Bill Manhire
> >>>>>
> >>>>
> >>>>
> >>>>
> >>>> --
> >>>> Andrew
> >>>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> >>>> Books available through Walleah Press
> >>>> http://walleahpress.com.au
> >>>>
> >>>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> --
> >> Andrew
> >> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> >> Books available through Walleah Press
> >> http://walleahpress.com.au
> >>
>
> Douglas Barbour
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>
> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
> 2 (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>
>
> The palms rattle, the eucalypts
> shed bark and blossom. Uninterpreted.
>
> Denise Levertov
>
--
Andrew
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