Thanks, Sheila, Doug, Bill, Andrew…
helpful friends…
Max near Harvard Square
On Oct 7, 2015, at 11:21, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I find your suggestions interesting, Sheila. What struck me most in Max’s poem, still here, is catching that sense of largeness the tongue knows…
>
> And, Max, the whole scene enacted…
>
> Doug
> On Oct 7, 2015, at 11:46 AM, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> Max, just a thought on possible shift of sequence and a deletion. Sheila
>>
>>
>> ‘Plenty of teeth left!’
>> I grimace at the wife.
>> She blenches and flinches,
>> wields defensively
>> her clenched chopsticks.
>>
>> It’s happened to her,
>> more than once - and at
>> the time was eating out.
>> This tooth I've lost,
>> picked out by fateI
>>
>> Like chook-bones
>> tooth fragments
>> are chomped on
>> and - preferably -
>> not swallowed.
>>
>> In this case, less tooth
>> joined the bone pile
>> on the side of my plate
>> than my tongue sensed
>> I’d lost from my mouth.
>>
>> in Seattle’s Chinatown
>> this summer night.
>> My smile’s no worse
>> than it ever was - a smile
>> these days you'll seldom see.
>>
>> But I smile inwardly.
>>
>> On Wed, Oct 7, 2015 at 5:16 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>>> I left my tooth,
>>> or most of it,
>>> in Chinatown,
>>> where a chook-bone
>>> shocked and broke it.
>>>
>>> Like chook-bones
>>> tooth fragments
>>> are chomped on
>>> and - preferably -
>>> not swallowed.
>>>
>>> In this case, less tooth
>>> joined the bone pile
>>> on the side of my plate
>>> than my tongue sensed
>>> I’d lost from my mouth.
>>>
>>> ‘Plenty of teeth left!’
>>> I grimace at the wife.
>>> She blenches and flinches,
>>> wields defensively
>>> her clenched chopsticks.
>>>
>>> It’s happened to her,
>>> more than once - and at
>>> the time was eating out.
>>> This tooth I've lost,
>>> picked out by fate
>>>
>>> in Seattle’s Chinatown
>>> this summer night.
>>> My smile’s no worse
>>> than it ever was - a smile
>>> these days you'll seldom see.
>>>
>>> But I smile inwardly.
>
> Douglas Barbour
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>
> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>
> Done in by creation itself.
>
> I mean the gods. Not us. Well us too.
> The gods moved into books. Who wrote the books?
> We wrote the books. In whose dream, then are we dreaming?
>
> Robert Kroetsch.
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