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Thanks, Sheila, Doug, Bill, Andrew… helpful friends… Max near Harvard Square On Oct 7, 2015, at 11:21, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > I find your suggestions interesting, Sheila. What struck me most in Max’s poem, still here, is catching that sense of largeness the tongue knows… > > And, Max, the whole scene enacted… > > Doug > On Oct 7, 2015, at 11:46 AM, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > >> Max, just a thought on possible shift of sequence and a deletion. Sheila >> >> >> ‘Plenty of teeth left!’ >> I grimace at the wife. >> She blenches and flinches, >> wields defensively >> her clenched chopsticks. >> >> It’s happened to her, >> more than once - and at >> the time was eating out. >> This tooth I've lost, >> picked out by fateI >> >> Like chook-bones >> tooth fragments >> are chomped on >> and - preferably - >> not swallowed. >> >> In this case, less tooth >> joined the bone pile >> on the side of my plate >> than my tongue sensed >> I’d lost from my mouth. >> >> in Seattle’s Chinatown >> this summer night. >> My smile’s no worse >> than it ever was - a smile >> these days you'll seldom see. >> >> But I smile inwardly. >> >> On Wed, Oct 7, 2015 at 5:16 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote: >> >>> I left my tooth, >>> or most of it, >>> in Chinatown, >>> where a chook-bone >>> shocked and broke it. >>> >>> Like chook-bones >>> tooth fragments >>> are chomped on >>> and - preferably - >>> not swallowed. >>> >>> In this case, less tooth >>> joined the bone pile >>> on the side of my plate >>> than my tongue sensed >>> I’d lost from my mouth. >>> >>> ‘Plenty of teeth left!’ >>> I grimace at the wife. >>> She blenches and flinches, >>> wields defensively >>> her clenched chopsticks. >>> >>> It’s happened to her, >>> more than once - and at >>> the time was eating out. >>> This tooth I've lost, >>> picked out by fate >>> >>> in Seattle’s Chinatown >>> this summer night. >>> My smile’s no worse >>> than it ever was - a smile >>> these days you'll seldom see. >>> >>> But I smile inwardly. > > Douglas Barbour > [log in to unmask] > > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 (UofAPress). > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press). > > Done in by creation itself. > > I mean the gods. Not us. Well us too. > The gods moved into books. Who wrote the books? > We wrote the books. In whose dream, then are we dreaming? > > Robert Kroetsch.