Or ‘ rhythm’… but I agree about the final 2 lines, jet too much repetition there…
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On Aug 26, 2015, at 8:05 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I'd drop the last two paras
> and the word "jazz"
>
> L
>
> On 26/08/2015, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>> to put the rose
>> in water
>> take off the last leaves
>>
>> throw its growing arms
>> arms
>>
>> make the rose fit
>> our scheme of
>> things
>>
>> *
>>
>> give old doubt
>> the chuck-out
>> get into your own
>> jazz rhythm
>>
>> rhythm-a-ling
>> ring-a-ring
>> a rosey
>>
>> when you
>> are coming out
>> of clouds of doubt
>> you want to shout
>> and play - okay,
>> that is it day
>> the end of play
>>
>> ~
>>
>> Just a page from a scrappy notebook, trying to get something going.
>>
Douglas Barbour
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