Thanks for sharing that dimension, Jill. I like this thought!
Sheila
On Aug 19, 2015 1:03 AM, "Jill Jones" <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Hi Shelia,
>
> I very much liked the anaphoric element in this, amongst other things.
> 'Where' has that kind of breath and smoke you are writing about, I
> feel.
>
> Cheers,
> Jill
>
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> Subject:snap: Smoke
>
> Where she is, they are
> indistinguishable from the sound
> of thin smoke rising
> to the heat of afternoon
>
> Where they are, trees are,
> along the warm cement wall
> where they sit, and where she smokes
> the slender brand, this gentle afternoon
>
> Where they speak, they do not hear
> smoke rise toward the blue
> behind lace branches where the shadow
> mimics slight moves of receiving branches
>
> Where she listens, her small breath
> is heard, not smoke, not voice,
> not thin wind, just the blend
> of each one being where they are
>
> Sheila E. Murphy
>
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