Thanks, Doug. I had a lot of trouble naming that one and I have already run
the changes on still life - life still etc... but slowly I get there. Glad
you got something out of it. One day I'll have to print them all out and
look at the whole thing as one. Not yet though!
L
On 12 February 2015 at 16:59, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Begins 'still,' but by the end I'd say there's a lot of activity,
> Lawrence. Movement through that 'life'?
>
> I found the line breaks also kept the thing jangly & active, how they
> stopped & shoved forward at once...
>
> Doug
> On Feb 12, 2015, at 6:03 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
> > white flowers greyed brick;
> >
> > porcelain Venus; dog
> >
> > breathing heavily,
> >
> > collapsing; creeper
> >
> > over walls; voices
> >
> > on a weak loudspeaker
> >
> > van between cars;
> >
> > automated distaste bad style,
> >
> > she says, increasingly,
> >
> > I hear voices,
> >
> > repetition of
> >
> > the obvious footholds
> >
> > in a failing cliff, high
> >
> > speed down hill, a broken
> >
> > arbour, desolate fields,
> >
> > inspection plate, man
> >
> > with a machine gun, buried
> >
> > cables, burst communications,
> >
> > a paint pot rusty
> >
> > from rain, dry now;
> >
> > another tipped on its
> >
> > side, a smile indicating
> >
> > trust, implying it
> >
> > at least, an indicative
> >
> > mutter, pardon is self-
> >
> > conscious defensive
> >
> > aggression held back;
> >
> > a small periscope;
> >
> > muffled voices calm;
> >
> > complete solutions;
> >
> > men with triumphant
> >
> > faces, gesturing
> >
> > in motion, displays
> >
> > flickering, capital
> >
> > expenditure loose;
> >
> > a typhoon of inner
> >
> > ear, petals unfolding
> >
> > from covered faces;
> >
> > circumnavigation
> >
> > of bare electric wires
> >
>
> Douglas Barbour
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>
> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2
> (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>
> that we are only
> as we find out we are
>
> Charles Olson
>
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