Well, Doug, first draft stopped after revealing what box now contains. I just thought I could get in with some
the more little time explorations.
Max, I'm wary of introducing drama. The watch faded away really. It's the box that's lasted. I just like the idea
that a box which to anyone else would be junk has been given a 'life' for some reason.
Bill
On Wed, Sep 24th, 2014 at 4:05 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Intriguing point, Max, but I agree about some neat urns of phrase
> (although I felt there could be some compression nearer the end, Bill; not
> rue how exactly, but felt it).
>
> There may be more stories attached to that watch?
>
> Doug
> On Sep 23, 2014, at 11:27 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > several nice turns of phrase and feeling here, Bill.
> > At this point, however, I sense a chance of drama lost:
> >
> > Presented
> > in a crimson Bullova box,
> > the only surviving remnant,
> >
> > watch forgotten in squash
> > change room long ago.
> >
> > Max in Seattle
> >
> > On Sep 23, 2014, at 11:48 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >
> >> Grandma Beat gave it to me
> >> for my tenth birthday, the dial,
> >> the size of the new ten cent bit,
> >> just right for my narrow wrist.
> >>
> >> Thin red second hand jerking
> >> over solid black numbers,
> >> luminous lime on gold
> >> outlined other hands.
> >>
> >> Stiff brown leather band
> >> with flimsy buckle. Presented
> >> in a crimson Bullova box,
> >> the only surviving remnant,
> >>
> >> watch forgotten in squash
> >> change room long ago.
> >> Box still in fine working order,
> >> now contains badges,
> >>
> >> also once worn: The Clash,
> >> No Nukes, Legalise It
> >> and, already obsolete,
> >> a pea-green iPod nano.
> >>
> >> Time was on everybody's
> >> hands back then. Wrist ready.
> >> Today digital numbers leap
> >> from mobile phones.
> >>
> >> Does it mean anything
> >> to anyone any more
> >> to tap on your naked
> >> wrist interrogatively?
> >>
> >> Grandma ran out of time
> >> a year after gifting me.
> >> The old box, having seen
> >> off what it contained
> >>
> >> may yet outlive its
> >> worn wearer.
> >>
> >>
> >> bw
> >
>
> Douglas Barbour
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>
> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2
> (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>
> that we are only
> as we find out we are
>
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