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Well, Doug, first draft stopped after revealing what box now contains. I just thought I could get in with some the more little time explorations. Max, I'm wary of introducing drama. The watch faded away really. It's the box that's lasted. I just like the idea that a box which to anyone else would be junk has been given a 'life' for some reason. Bill On Wed, Sep 24th, 2014 at 4:05 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Intriguing point, Max, but I agree about some neat urns of phrase > (although I felt there could be some compression nearer the end, Bill; not > rue how exactly, but felt it). > > There may be more stories attached to that watch? > > Doug > On Sep 23, 2014, at 11:27 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > > several nice turns of phrase and feeling here, Bill. > > At this point, however, I sense a chance of drama lost: > > > > Presented > > in a crimson Bullova box, > > the only surviving remnant, > > > > watch forgotten in squash > > change room long ago. > > > > Max in Seattle > > > > On Sep 23, 2014, at 11:48 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> > wrote: > > > >> Grandma Beat gave it to me > >> for my tenth birthday, the dial, > >> the size of the new ten cent bit, > >> just right for my narrow wrist. > >> > >> Thin red second hand jerking > >> over solid black numbers, > >> luminous lime on gold > >> outlined other hands. > >> > >> Stiff brown leather band > >> with flimsy buckle. Presented > >> in a crimson Bullova box, > >> the only surviving remnant, > >> > >> watch forgotten in squash > >> change room long ago. > >> Box still in fine working order, > >> now contains badges, > >> > >> also once worn: The Clash, > >> No Nukes, Legalise It > >> and, already obsolete, > >> a pea-green iPod nano. > >> > >> Time was on everybody's > >> hands back then. Wrist ready. > >> Today digital numbers leap > >> from mobile phones. > >> > >> Does it mean anything > >> to anyone any more > >> to tap on your naked > >> wrist interrogatively? > >> > >> Grandma ran out of time > >> a year after gifting me. > >> The old box, having seen > >> off what it contained > >> > >> may yet outlive its > >> worn wearer. > >> > >> > >> bw > > > > Douglas Barbour > [log in to unmask] > > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 > (UofAPress). > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press). > > that we are only > as we find out we are > > Charles Olson > >