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Doug
On Aug 14, 2014, at 3:17 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> It's alright, Ma was only bleeding.
>
>> On 15 Aug 2014, at 12:51 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>> Well, I’d argue that Ma was waxing just a little ironic there, Andrew…
>>
>> Doug
>>> On Aug 13, 2014, at 6:51 PM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>
>>> Yes, great poem, Max. But I dispute the last statement, 'beauty is youth,
>>> youth beauty'. In this old town, there's beauty up and down the main
>>> street, getting out of dusty old utes and paddock-scented 4x4s - there's
>>> even a particular beauty in gnarled old trees leaning out over Murray
>>> River. But, of course, there's also a frisky beauty in the girls flirting
>>> with the boys before they all race off to the big smoke ... Our optometrist
>>> is here but twice a week and she takes shit from no man!
>>>
>>> Andrew
>>>
>>>
>>>> On 14 August 2014 09:53, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>>
>>>> Yes I like the beauty zeroing down to 'the woman's' pupils, Max. The light
>>>> and dark works well too. Not sure of enchantment/enhancement but unlike
>>>> you, Pat, happy with the rounding off with a bit of a Keatsian flourish.
>>>>
>>>> Bill
>>>>
>>>>>> On 14 Aug 2014, at 1:48 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>> AH, but Max, your 'beauty' comes on the heels of a bunch of such terms,
>>>> which as they pile up become somewhat concrete, it feels, that being the
>>>> mystery of language at work. And I really enjoy the sly
>>>> pseudo-self-deprecation at work in the poem, its humour...
>>>>>
>>>>> Doug
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>> On Aug 13, 2014, at 4:35 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]>
>>>> wrote:
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Pupils
>>>>>>
>>>>>> The woman at the opticians,
>>>>>> who takes me into her dark room
>>>>>> for intimate transactions,
>>>>>> is exquisite - fine-featured,
>>>>>>
>>>>>> slow to smile, elegant of hand
>>>>>> and hip. She shines her light
>>>>>> and herself deep into my eyes.
>>>>>> saying 'you have small pupils'!
>>>>>>
>>>>>> (My lack of success with women
>>>>>> explained by yet another reason!)
>>>>>> I begin a sly campaign
>>>>>> to survey her pupils' fluctuation -
>>>>>>
>>>>>> now large in the dark, now less
>>>>>> in the well-lit corridor, smallest
>>>>>> out in the public space where frames
>>>>>> are chosen at great expense
>>>>>>
>>>>>> to enhance one's chances
>>>>>> of glamorous enchantment.
>>>>>> She's put on spectacles herself,
>>>>>> as if her looks need some enhancement.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Fair girl, unframed is best. Fair
>>>>>> young men, fair children - smile on.
>>>>>> Our eyes are all on you, as yours
>>>>>> are on each other. We were young once,
>>>>>>
>>>>>> though scarcely knew it. Old now, leaning
>>>>>> back - yearning back - at our sunset hour
>>>>>> it dawns on us: Beauty is youth, youth
>>>>>> beauty, - that is all we know on earth.
>>>>>
>>>>> Douglas Barbour
>>>>> [log in to unmask]
>>>>>
>>>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation
>>>> 2 (UofAPress).
>>>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>>>
>>>>> Something else is out there
>>>>> godamnit
>>>>>
>>>>> And I want to hear it
>>>>>
>>>>> C.D.Wright
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> --
>>> Andrew
>>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
>>
>> Douglas Barbour
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>>
>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>
>> Something else is out there
>> godamnit
>>
>> And I want to hear it
>>
>> C.D.Wright
>>
>
Douglas Barbour
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Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
Something else is out there
godamnit
And I want to hear it
C.D.Wright
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