Ah, but which do you prefer, Bill?
In both, there's a slippage into a kind of passivity at the end; to me, it seems more 'fitting' in the first iteration. If it's what you want there.
It's how such a poem invites us to read that 'I', isnt it...
Doug
On 2013-01-17, at 9:39 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Here tis with perpendicularity restored then, Doug.
>
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> Everything I do is slight.
> Sometimes I begin with solemnity,
> addressing what I think is a complexity,
> with serious application ...
> but before long a flippancy enters,
> wherefrom I do not know
> and things are just tidied up.
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> On 18/01/2013, at 4:14 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> Never a Bible, Bill.
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>> Some possibilities, that may work for some people some of the time....
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>> Doug
>> On 2013-01-16, at 1:09 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>>> Well, heeding advice from The Doug Bible, the pependicular pronoun has been excised.
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>>> On 17/01/2013, at 3:22 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>>>> Without a single human act interfering, I assume....?
>>>>
>>>> Doug
>>>> On 2013-01-15, at 2:10 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>>>>> Everything turns out slight
>>>>> although begun with solemnity
>>>>> addressing complexity
>>>>> before long a flippancy
>>>>> enters from somewhere
>>>>> and things are tidied up
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>>>> Douglas Barbour
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>>>> Swept snow, Li Po,
>>>> by dawn’s 40-watt moon
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>>>> Lorine Niedecker
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Latest books:
Continuations & Continuations 2 (with Sheila E Murphy)
http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=962
Wednesdays'
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Reserved books. Reserved land. Reserved flight.
And still property is theft.
Phyllis Webb
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