Okay:
& that's then a highly constructed 'I', which readers don't always get…
Doug
On 2013-01-18, at 1:37 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> That's the point, Doug, the 'slippage into passivity', which is being lamented, ironically perhaps even in the slight poem itself. The problem with the first version I posted is that by removing the first person it sounds like there is a tendency in nature for things to 'blandify' whereas the point is that blame for lack of rigour or application should sheet home. So in that sense, the second posting is more fitting.
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> Thanks for your attention,
> Bill
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> On 19/01/2013, at 3:03 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> Ah, but which do you prefer, Bill?
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>> In both, there's a slippage into a kind of passivity at the end; to me, it seems more 'fitting' in the first iteration. If it's what you want there.
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>> It's how such a poem invites us to read that 'I', isnt it...
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>> Doug
>> On 2013-01-17, at 9:39 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>>> Here tis with perpendicularity restored then, Doug.
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>>>
>>> Everything I do is slight.
>>> Sometimes I begin with solemnity,
>>> addressing what I think is a complexity,
>>> with serious application ...
>>> but before long a flippancy enters,
>>> wherefrom I do not know
>>> and things are just tidied up.
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>>> On 18/01/2013, at 4:14 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>>>> Never a Bible, Bill.
>>>>
>>>> Some possibilities, that may work for some people some of the time....
>>>>
>>>> Doug
>>>> On 2013-01-16, at 1:09 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>>>>> Well, heeding advice from The Doug Bible, the pependicular pronoun has been excised.
>>>>>
>>>>> On 17/01/2013, at 3:22 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>>> Without a single human act interfering, I assume....?
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Doug
>>>>>> On 2013-01-15, at 2:10 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Everything turns out slight
>>>>>>> although begun with solemnity
>>>>>>> addressing complexity
>>>>>>> before long a flippancy
>>>>>>> enters from somewhere
>>>>>>> and things are tidied up
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Douglas Barbour
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>> Continuations & Continuations 2 (with Sheila E Murphy)
>> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=962
>> Wednesdays'
>> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
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>> Reserved books. Reserved land. Reserved flight.
>> And still property is theft.
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>> Phyllis Webb
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Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
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Something else is out there
godamnit
And I want to hear it
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