ok. nice thinking. how about an ampersand?
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On Nov 9, 2011, at 6:16 AM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
> Hi cris
>
> I didn't say _emphasise it_
>
> I was vague. I wasn't meaning to be coy. I was speeding up. I wanted to
> get coffee before they closed etc. The story of a panic
>
> What I have in mind is more to do with speed and rhythm. as a coefficient
>
> starting with and, the way I hear it. puts the voice on a downhill run,
> speeds it, pulls it
>
> yours beginning _slow_ is more stately
>
> and I am interested in going through that rushing
>
> I'm prioritising the uttered over the page read
>
> L
>
> On Tue, November 8, 2011 19:35, cris cheek wrote:
>> even IF you emphasise it . . the repetition seems redundant
>>
>> it's implied?
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>> c
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>> On Nov 8, 2011, at 12:10 PM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
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>>> depends how you read it
>>>
>>> L
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>>> On Tue, November 8, 2011 17:03, cris cheek wrote:
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>>>> i might venture that we don't need that and after the semi-colon
>>>>
>>>> just launch into
>>>>
>>>> slow broad unripe depths atop . . .
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>>>>
>>>> x
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>>>> c
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>>>> On Nov 8, 2011, at 11:55 AM, Patrick McManus wrote:
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>>>>> Sundering I sunder sometimes cheers P great stuff
>>>>> Not sure if we need continuity? (no doubt essential and that I am
>>>>> missing the whole point!!)
>>>>>
>>>>> -----Original Message-----
>>>>> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics
>>>>> [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
>>>>> Behalf Of Lawrence Upton
>>>>> Sent: 08 November 2011 13:12
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>>>>> Subject: The Bar between St Agnes and The Gugh from Wingletang
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> A strong quick fluster of crayon lines
>>>>> jabbing through into storm waves
>>>>>
>>>>> blue wash over grey, and green within both; and slow broad unripe
>>>>> depths atop drawn stab marks joining rock and rocks tenuously
>>>>> despite encroaching sea breakers rising moving crabwise
>>>>>
>>>>> brown smatterings of weed break up cream and white and dangerous
>>>>> continuity The Gugh may be solid beyond the east of Agnes
>>>>>
>>>>> but it's not whole
>>>>>
>>>>> all this a sundering of one into two, and three if sea's a thing
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
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>>>>> UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton
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>>> UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton
>>> 42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover
>>> Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4
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> UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton
> 42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover
> Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4
> wfuk.org.uk/blog
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