Well, if I pass the Barrett Reid test, that is, indeed, good.
And thinking this re-formed version of the longer original may be the
one that I stick to.
Cheers,
Jill
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On 18/02/2011, at 2:43 PM, andrew burke wrote:
> I asked an editor in my early insecure days what he looked for in a
> poem (it
> was Barrett Reid, for those Aussies among us). He replied, 'Surprise
> me.'
> That's what I like about the cut and thrust of this one, Jill - a
> surprise
> in every line, but a poetic sense in it all.
>
> Andrew
>
> On 18 February 2011 09:46, Stephen Vincent <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
>> Jill, for some probably only yours truly reason, I began to think
>> of your
>> prosody as a kind of organized dis-assembling, that is seeing it
>> asbecoming
>> to
>> represent, or be the syntax for current upheavals Australian
>> cartography!
>> Between cyclones and floods - presented to us frequently in TV in
>> the USA -
>> the
>> landscapes and towns are a visual cacophony of multiple breaches,
>> collisions,
>> etc. It only fits that poetry - the words - as such wd follow, no??
>>
>> Similary, One wonders what is happening to syntax through out the
>> Mideast,
>> too!
>> I like what you have done with your own.
>>
>> Stephen V
>>
>>
>>
>>
>> ________________________________
>> From: Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]>
>> To: [log in to unmask]
>> Sent: Thu, February 17, 2011 3:03:12 PM
>> Subject: Re: snap - reformed
>>
>> Hi Doug,
>>
>> Thanks. And the line spacing is a weird thing my email does
>> sometimes when
>> I
>> paste in from Word. It wasn't always thus, so not sure why. Because
>> I agree
>> with
>> yr thot and would also think the same if I saw lines with line space
>> between.
>>
>> Cheers,
>> Jill
>>
>>
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>> Jill Jones
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>>
>> website: www.jilljones.com.au
>> blog: rubystreet.blogspot.com
>>
>> On 18/02/2011, at 2:42 AM, Douglas Barbour wrote:
>>
>>> Talk about sampling: this works terrifically well, Jill.
>>>
>>> A small question: when I see double spacing (out of Olson etc) I
>>> think
>> I'm
>>> meant to read each line very separately (as if each line were a
>>> kind of
>> stanza),
>>> but it may just be how it appears in the e-mail here?
>>>
>>> But I loved the swerves...
>>>
>>> Doug
>>> On 2011-02-17, at 12:01 AM, Jill Jones wrote:
>>>
>>>> Gem/ weird, reforming
>>>
>>> Douglas Barbour
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>>>
>>> http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/
>>> http://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>>>
>>> Latest books:
>>> Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
>>> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
>>> Wednesdays'
>>>
>>
>> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
>>>
>>> Language has unmistakably made plain that memory is not an
>>> instrument for
>>> exploring the past but its theater. It is the medium of past
>>> experience,
>> just as
>>> the earth is the medium in which dead cities lie buried.
>>>
>>> Walter Benjamin
>>
>
>
>
> --
> Andrew
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> http://www.picaropress.com/
> http://www.qlrs.com/poem.asp?id=766
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