Thanks Millicent, Andrew, Doug, Anny. Fixing is in train.
Max
On 10/06/10 1:44 AM, "Anny Ballardini" <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I like Max's idea and agree with Andrew's chopping up,
> cheers, Anny
>
> On Wed, Jun 9, 2010 at 8:05 AM, andrew burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> I arrogantly chopped it up to suit my taste, Max. 'Lovely' is a summary
>> word
>> which says nothing. And there were a few tautologies. Excuse me if I hqave
>> offended.
>>
>>
>>
>> His daughter was like a new
>> version of her mother, graceful.
>>
>> With so few words, her best
>> task was sitting for Dad
>>
>> while he sculpted intently.
>> A speaking likeness? Never -
>>
>> mute as sculptures are:
>>
>> her smile, noble forehead,
>> withheld pain, hinting at
>>
>> a hope, a chance
>> of expression.
>>
>>
>>
>> On 9 June 2010 10:28, Millicent <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>>> I think you can start the poem with "was lovely" since the title nicely
>>> serves as the first line.
>>>
>>> The Sculptoršs Daughter
>>>
>>>
>>> Was lovely, like a new
>>> version of her mother, graceful
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> Millicent
>>>
>>>
>>> -----Original Message-----
>>> From: Max Richards <[log in to unmask]>
>>> To: [log in to unmask]
>>> Sent: Tue, Jun 8, 2010 4:33 pm
>>> Subject: snap: the sculptor's daughter
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> The Sculptoršs Daughter
>>>
>>> is daughter was lovely, like a new
>>> ersion of her mother, graceful
>>> but almost silent with so few words
>>> er best task was sitting for Dad
>>> while he lovingly sculpted.
>>> speaking likeness? Never,
>>> but mute as sculptures are,
>>> hey represent her well:
>>> her smile, her noble forehead,
>>> uch pain, something withheld,
>>> hinting a lurking hope
>>> chance of expression.
>>>
>>> Max Richards
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>
>>
>> --
>> Andrew
>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
>> 'Mother Waits for Father Late' republished available at
>> http://www.picaropress.com/
>> http://www.qlrs.com/poem.asp?id=766
>> http://frankshome.org/AndrewBurke.html
>>
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