That can come right after what I owe to Dick/Richard (the dude who tricked
me into coughing it up in the first place). He said I should open it with a
BANG. Girl listening to iPod in the kitchen with a frying pan, in comes
hubby wraps arms around her goes for a morning smooch & BAM frying pan to
the dome blood all over the scrambie eggs. I added the blood splatter
effect. That is my list of wants. Stylized bone crunching splatter effects
that are tasteful but branded.
See, I knew I should of waited until I threw up the concept.
What I would like is exactly what you did; but, I lay down the initial
structure/architecture in a way where it's fill in the blanks and sort. I
have a rough location, character lead into etc...
On Sun, Apr 18, 2010 at 6:44 PM, Judy Prince
<[log in to unmask]>wrote:
> Group-writing, or, more aptly, the Chinese Whisper Game of group-writing,
> could be cool. But do you want us to flesh out your story, or just have a
> wild go at any subject we want? If you want us to flesh out your story,
> I'd
> have to decline bcuz I think you should do it all yourself. I'm not much
> on
> workshopped plays for lotsa reasons.
>
> Having just read two sf novels with the kind of thrills you mention with
> your story, I'd now rather sit down with a bodice-ripper or a simple and
> elegant poem or two.
>
> Might be just that, as nearly always, some stories are "man" stories, some
> stories are "woman" stories------and there're really great stories that are
> both, or p'raps neither.
>
> Here's my contribution to your first scene:
>
> *George*: "Throw away that nasty guitar. We don't need music performed by
> a severed hand. That's SO yesterday."
>
> *Frank*: "It's my severed hand, and I'm keeping it for......other uses
> besides guitar-plucking. Right now it needs practice on such pieces as
> *Clair
> de Lune* and *Flight of the Bumblebees*."
>
> *George*: "Just keep the bleeping hand away from my Lab!"
>
> *Frank*: "But you said I could experiment in your lab!"
>
> *George*: "Idiot. I meant my Labrador."
>
> (Act One, scene one incomplete)
>
> ---------------------
>
> Have fun,
>
> joodled playwright
>
> On 18 April 2010 21:26, Angel Robert Marquez <[log in to unmask]
> >wrote:
>
> > >
> > > Thanks for Frank(enstein), Angel.
> > >
> > > Why don't you start writing your screenplay?
> >
> > I did/have.
> >
> >
> > > Your client got to hear all
> > > your play ideas, but insteada telling them to us, you ask us to
> > group-write
> > > the thing. 'Supwidat?
> > >
> > Well, he tricked me. Group-write would just be interesting for
> > collaboration research and a good time to mess with the new wp install.
> >
> > The story's bout a guy who writes, records, and self distributes music
> and
> > unknown to him the listeners wind up killing an authority figure. The
> hook
> > is it's not him, the guitar is possessed and compels him to do it's
> > bidding.
> > Story winds down to cop has theory and his partner tries to kill him when
> > testing the theory...BUT girl gets to the guy and kills him and takes the
> > guitar. THEN the screen pans out to a future audience where the keynote
> is
> > how they pulled all the memories from and inanimate object with this new
> > technology and of course someone on the audience has their eyes on the
> > guitar and THE END. Theirs lots of room to play. I have pretty much every
> > character scene etc in place, I am just more interested in other peoples
> > takes than my own. All tied together nicely for a real thrill packed
> roller
> > coaster ride through knowing, unknowing and BAM. I even have and
> > endorsement
> > model for all the listening devices that the killers would listen to
> before
> > they switched to crazy. I could even put my crappy music playing in the
> > back
> > ground of all the death scenes seeing it's sketchy production would fit
> the
> > mold.
> >
> > C'mon judy, I'll be your best friend!
> >
> > >
> > > Judy
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > On 17 April 2010 23:38, Angel Robert Marquez <[log in to unmask]
> > > >wrote:
> > >
> > > > Okay poetry people. Let me throw this at you.
> > > >
> > > > Like I said in the beginning I like to write and it's fun to get it
> out
> > > > etc..
> > > >
> > > > So, not to be the pretentious guy that lives in the LA area; but,
> > rather
> > > > the
> > > > dude you all love to hate and would like to work on a 'project' as a
> > > > collective with. I have a screenplay!
> > > >
> > > > lol
> > > > BUT, really I do. It's been refined etc..lets say more of an outline
> > than
> > > > an
> > > > actual finished product. Anyhow, I do freelance work in LA and a
> recent
> > > > client was a pretty cool dude. Although, the last time we met we
> spent
> > > the
> > > > first 3 hours (paid) with him pulling a screen play out of his
> cabinet
> > > and
> > > > reciting it to me as I fueled the fire as a listener and interested
> > > party.
> > > > Because I was interested and his screenplay was not totally original
> > but
> > > > entertaining. Anyways, he also showed me this bad ass music videos
> his
> > > son
> > > > produces in NYC and I was extremely impressed. Yes, so, like a fool
> > > > revealed my master piece in like 5 minutes, not nearly as
> entertaining,
> > > > animated, or acted as him; but, a quick 1,2,3 punch. I kind of felt
> > like
> > > I
> > > > made a bad move. I liked the dude a lot as a client and person he was
> > > funny
> > > > and reeled me in like a pro. I hadn't told ANYONE about this
> particular
> > > > secret project, I was just letting it germinate. This guy said he had
> > > > connections with the industry etc and he told me the new plans Disney
> > and
> > > > some other studios were making.
> > > >
> > > > Which brings me to this. The guy gave me this DVD about writing
> > > screenplays
> > > > and I want to 'open source' my concept; but, not if people aren't
> > > > interested. I like you guys and you all have a distinct writing style
> > and
> > > > think as a group something interesting might emerge from my throwing
> > this
> > > > out:
> > > > http://www.play.angelrobertmarquez.com/
> > > >
> > > > So, the link above could be used as a collaborative effort. I could
> > give
> > > > everyone or anyone access to the admin and they could even learn
> about
> > > > wordpress at the same time.
> > > >
> > > > My vision would be someone owns each ACT, and then kind of lets
> things
> > > > happen. I haven't put my high concept up there yet though. I was
> > thinking
> > > > if somebody says I want to hear it I will throw it down if not I'll
> > keep
> > > it
> > > > to myself. It might never go anywhere that way though.
> > > >
> > > > What do you think?
> > > >
> > > > Thoughts?
> > > >
> > > > I have more to add BUT, I don't want to overwhelm. I think
> Frankenstein
> > > > came
> > > > from a group of writers playing with who could write the scariest
> story
> > > > etc..
> > > >
> > > > I think the blog would be cool to use to see the progress and add
> ideas
> > > > easily along the way. I would compile the final and distribute indie
> > > style.
> > > > we could change the domain along the way and use the blog as a
> > purchasing
> > > > channel/platform.
> > > >
> > > > Let me know what you think : )
> > > >
> > >
> >
>
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