I may be showing awesome ignorance here, K, but I'd thought the whole point
of Doug's little prepositions-at-lines'-ends poem WAS just
that---prepositions at lines' ends. Quite neat, that!
Best,
Judy
2008/12/16 kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]>
> <<Why don't you insert a noun of your choosing at the end of each line and
> then decide
> whether enjambement isn't indeed Doug's focus?>>
>
> the enjambement is always the, or *a*, focus.
> actually, I thought that the poem itself made poetic as well as grammatical
> sense just as it is, with nothing added or subtracted:
>
> moon in clouds above snow about a whiter shade of pales.
>
> I took, probably wrongly, the "by" to be a bit of a joke, i.e. 'written
> by'.
> ah well.
> also did I detect a hint of unwarranted sneering, Barry? hope not.
>
> KS
>
> 2008/12/14 Barry Alpert <[log in to unmask]>
>
> > Why don't you insert a noun of your choosing at the end of each line and
> > then decide
> > whether enjambement isn't indeed Doug's focus?
> >
> > Barry Alpert
> >
> > I can remember when the elimination of "articles" dominated my writing
> > process, and
> > that I cited "dichter=condensare" as a justification.
> >
> >
> > On Sat, 13 Dec 2008 02:04:50 +0200, kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]>
> > wrote:
> >
> > >great colourdab of a poem! I dislike the enjambement a lot though.
> > >
> > >KS
> > >
> > >2008/12/11 Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> > >
> > >> moon in
> > >> clouds above
> > >> snow about
> > >> a whiter shade of
> > >> pales by
> > >>
> > >>
> > >> Douglas Barbour
> > >> [log in to unmask]
> > >>
> > >> http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/ <
> http://www.ualberta.ca/%7Edbarbour/><
> > http://www.ualberta.ca/%7Edbarbour/>
> > >>
> > >> Latest books:
> > >> Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
> > >> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
> > >> Wednesdays'
> > >>
> > >> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-
> > press_10.html<
> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
> >
> > >>
> > >> Why have you driven through my heart?
> > >> Make that what.
> > >>
> > >> Artie Gold
> > >>
> >
>
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