preps at line ends, of course; but I didn't realise that the poem needed
filling in on the reader's part as well!
I mean why not, just wasn't the first thought to strike me. :)
KS
2008/12/17 Judy Prince <[log in to unmask]>
> I may be showing awesome ignorance here, K, but I'd thought the whole point
> of Doug's little prepositions-at-lines'-ends poem WAS just
> that---prepositions at lines' ends. Quite neat, that!
> Best,
>
> Judy
>
> 2008/12/16 kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]>
>
> > <<Why don't you insert a noun of your choosing at the end of each line
> and
> > then decide
> > whether enjambement isn't indeed Doug's focus?>>
> >
> > the enjambement is always the, or *a*, focus.
> > actually, I thought that the poem itself made poetic as well as
> grammatical
> > sense just as it is, with nothing added or subtracted:
> >
> > moon in clouds above snow about a whiter shade of pales.
> >
> > I took, probably wrongly, the "by" to be a bit of a joke, i.e. 'written
> > by'.
> > ah well.
> > also did I detect a hint of unwarranted sneering, Barry? hope not.
> >
> > KS
> >
> > 2008/12/14 Barry Alpert <[log in to unmask]>
> >
> > > Why don't you insert a noun of your choosing at the end of each line
> and
> > > then decide
> > > whether enjambement isn't indeed Doug's focus?
> > >
> > > Barry Alpert
> > >
> > > I can remember when the elimination of "articles" dominated my writing
> > > process, and
> > > that I cited "dichter=condensare" as a justification.
> > >
> > >
> > > On Sat, 13 Dec 2008 02:04:50 +0200, kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]
> >
> > > wrote:
> > >
> > > >great colourdab of a poem! I dislike the enjambement a lot though.
> > > >
> > > >KS
> > > >
> > > >2008/12/11 Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> > > >
> > > >> moon in
> > > >> clouds above
> > > >> snow about
> > > >> a whiter shade of
> > > >> pales by
> > > >>
> > > >>
> > > >> Douglas Barbour
> > > >> [log in to unmask]
> > > >>
> > > >> http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/<http://www.ualberta.ca/%7Edbarbour/><
> > http://www.ualberta.ca/%7Edbarbour/><
> > > http://www.ualberta.ca/%7Edbarbour/>
> > > >>
> > > >> Latest books:
> > > >> Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
> > > >> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
> > > >> Wednesdays'
> > > >>
> > > >> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-
> > > press_10.html<
> >
> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
> > >
> > > >>
> > > >> Why have you driven through my heart?
> > > >> Make that what.
> > > >>
> > > >> Artie Gold
> > > >>
> > >
> >
>
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