Why don't you insert a noun of your choosing at the end of each line and then decide
whether enjambement isn't indeed Doug's focus?
Barry Alpert
I can remember when the elimination of "articles" dominated my writing process, and
that I cited "dichter=condensare" as a justification.
On Sat, 13 Dec 2008 02:04:50 +0200, kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>great colourdab of a poem! I dislike the enjambement a lot though.
>
>KS
>
>2008/12/11 Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
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>> moon in
>> clouds above
>> snow about
>> a whiter shade of
>> pales by
>>
>>
>> Douglas Barbour
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>> http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/ <http://www.ualberta.ca/%7Edbarbour/>
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>> Latest books:
>> Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
>> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
>> Wednesdays'
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>> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-
press_10.html
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>> Why have you driven through my heart?
>> Make that what.
>>
>> Artie Gold
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