Well, okay
but I think I enjoyed & was caught up by the first version more,
Roger....
Doug
On 9-Sep-08, at 6:10 AM, Roger Day wrote:
> swifts cloud the sheer face
> faux marble curtain-wall
> glass-plate suspension
> brownian motion
> whispering against smoothness
> sometimes a little one
> approaches glissando
> flaps and hovers
> fails to find purchase
> a poor man at Harrods
> a Norfolk accent for afternoon tea
> a white-man at Hammersmith Palais
> a black-man at Whites
> eave-less walls
> sterile crops
> naked skin on arctic ice
> fingers in volcano ash
> yet still we look for rest
>
>
> 1. Dave & Judy were right insofaras I thought of the first bit with
> the swifts, then added the rest. In a normal snap, I would have left
> the pairs out, but I had this neat idea. I still don't think I've
> "rescued" the first part re: Dave's comments but that's it for now.
> 2. The Hammersmith Palais is a quote from the Clash
> 3. Whites is an "exclusive" club in London.
> 4. Eaveless walls give no comfort for birds, hence partly the reason
> for their decline.
> 5. Swifts like to cling to and nest on cliff-faces. Of course they
> can't do this with an actual cliff face.
> 6. I'm an intuitive, not a more technical poet. I'm atrocious with
> trochee. Or is that crochet?
> 7. Difficulty. I make no apologies. No pain no gain. As AS Byatt said
> about characters in Modernist works, you get the most out of the
> relationships you have to work at.
> 8. the poem is in the style of an aggregation, a collage. It works by
> accumulationn rather than narrative.
> 9. Afternoon is sometime a snooty middle-class affair. We did similar,
> but never called it "afternoon tea". Such are the subtleties of
> class-life in England.
>
> Sorry this is short, off to the proms tonight, this is my lunch hour.
> The Chicago symphony Orchestra were sodding marvelous last night. Wow.
>
> Roger
>
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>
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