Dear Roger
I'd be very interested to see what you have to say to my post. I
looked back on it myself this morning and thought, um, not sure about
that, I don't know there either, and stroked my metaphorical beard.
Unfortunately, you haven't said anything here. As in no words.
I thought judy's subsequent examination was more to the point, even if
she doesn't know what the Palais is!
All the Best
dave
2008/9/7 Roger Day <[log in to unmask]>:
> On 9/7/08, David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>> I like it too Roger, but I'd also venture that in parts it reads like
>> words in search of their object, qualifiers longing for a subject. The
>> rhythm gets a-moving in the middle for a bit, but the page for the eye
>> unannounced spondee at the start doesn't move the rest on. It seems
>> like a notional thing, the idea of it rather than the it. Or is it a
>> spondee: could be a trochee, could be an iamb, could an almost
>> anything within two units: do like it still, sorry if I sound harsh,
>> for me, though, it does stall at the head.
>>
>> All the Best
>>
>> 2008/9/7 Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>:
>> > I like it, Roger. That wall, clouded/crowded that way, & the while moving
>> > 'swiftly,' as Andrew also says...
>> >
>> > Doug
>> > On 6-Sep-08, at 11:08 AM, Roger Day wrote:
>> >
>> >> swifts cloud
>> >> on a vertical face
>> >> marble
>> >> glass
>> >> sometimes
>> >> one nears the wall
>> >> fails to find purchase
>> >> a poor man at Harrods
>> >> a Norfolk accent for afternoon tea
>> >> a white-man at Hammersmith Palais
>> >> a black-man at Whites
>> >> eave-less walls
>> >> sterile crops
>> >> naked skin on arctic ice
>> >> fingers in volcano ash
>> >> yet still they look for rest
>> >>
>> >> --
>> >> My Stuff: http://www.badstep.net/
>> >> "I began to warm and chill
>> >> to objects and their fields"
>> >> Nick Cave & The Bad Seeds
>> >>
>> >
>> > Douglas Barbour
>> > [log in to unmask]
>> >
>> > http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/
>> >
>> > Latest books:
>> > Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
>> > http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
>> > Wednesdays'
>> > http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
>> >
>> > A little planet blues, for the
>> > deathwatch.
>> > A season of rictus riffs.
>> >
>> > Dennis Lee
>> >
>>
>>
>>
>> --
>> David Bircumshaw
>> Website and A Chide's Alphabet http://homepage.ntlworld.com/david.bircumshaw/
>> The Animal Subsides http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html
>> Leicester Poetry Society: http://www.poetryleicester.co.uk
>>
>
>
> --
> My Stuff: http://www.badstep.net/
> "I began to warm and chill
> to objects and their fields"
> Nick Cave & The Bad Seeds
>
--
David Bircumshaw
Website and A Chide's Alphabet http://homepage.ntlworld.com/david.bircumshaw/
The Animal Subsides http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html
Leicester Poetry Society: http://www.poetryleicester.co.uk
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