Thank you both Candice and Anny.
It was a very hard poem to write because its source, the real events
that prompted it, resisted poetry. I destroyed the first version of it
completely, rather than revised.
I hope I am getting better all the time, in writing at least, I'm just
trying to redefine things to myself, and find a way to write from the
bottom-up, rather than the top down.
2008/5/6 MC Ward <[log in to unmask]>:
> It's a terrific poem, Dave, with cumulative power and
> shock value. (If it isn't too condescending to say so,
> you get better all the time.)
>
> More please,
> Candice
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David Bircumshaw
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