I certainly haven't felt happy about the second occurrence of 'us' in
stz 1, Doug, so I'll think about that.
Best
Dave
2008/5/6 Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>:
> Because I think the 'all' in the 2nd st works so well, i wonder if you can
> get it into the first, Dave? I recognize the need for 'we', but wasnt sure
> the 'us' in st 1 wouldnt be better if more distanced 9as seen by the them,
> of course)...
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> Doug
> On 5-May-08, at 8:26 AM, David Bircumshaw wrote:
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